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ianam1983

Never Did Run Smooth, Ch. 25

Jan 25, 2010 03:18

Finally! The chapter with sex in it! Of course, it does not come free of drama. And there's a bit more of the kid and the monkey first; you can skip that if you're impatient. XP

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slash, rattrap, pr0n!, dinobot

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gogglehead84 January 25 2010, 12:02:10 UTC

Wow, that was some....wow. XD

blkdragonqueen January 25 2010, 13:32:09 UTC

FINALLY! *Happy Dance* Oh wow! That was just Epic! The smut I mean XD Though I did like the first part with Cheetor and Mimic. ^_^ Very cute.

But the second half! Whew! Talk about captivating! Rattrap allowing Dinobot's inner beast and predacon tear into him like that! Makes me wonder what it is in his past that makes him crave such brutality.

ianam1983 January 25 2010, 18:34:00 UTC

That's the three-million-dollar question, isn't it? ;)

akisawana January 25 2010, 17:33:04 UTC

OH GOD, I KNOW HOW THIS IS GOING TO END. RATTRAP+DINOBOT+SEX CANNOT END WELL.
ALSO, I LOVE MIMIC. TO BITSES. I AM SO LOOKING FORWARD TO WRITING "MIMIC SAVES THE DAY!" BUT IT REQUIRES SILVERBOLT.
AWW, CHEETOR. YOU'RE GROWING UP. THAT'S ADORABLE. SO IS KITTY-YOGA.

Well. That there's some whiplash. Seriously.
RATTRAP. YOUR SEXYTALK. IS FAIL. ALSO, ONE WITH A SOUTH BOSTON ACCENT SHOULD NEVER ATTEMPT SEXYTALK. TRUST ME ON THIS ONE.
Also, "filthy little Pred-lover?" I mean, I know you're rather more proud of being a rodent than, say, Splinter, but. It's quite amazing how four words can be so right and so wrong.
Oh, Dinobot. I thought you had learned how to make Rattrap shut up. And it's not your hand over his mouth.
There are literally so many ear quotes, I got an overflow error trying to pick one.
And I would not want Rattrap's skin. Also, it's too early for me to start emoing and hating Rhinox. Also, why does PAIN get ALL CAPS?
Also. Rattrap. RATTRAP. RATTRAP. I know you have a deathwish, but are you trying to take Dinobot down with you ( ... )

ianam1983 January 25 2010, 18:32:31 UTC

Don't you hate being right?

I have to watch her carefully or she'll steal the story. (And pick it apart to see how it works, before discarding it out of boredom.)

Re: Cheetor growing up -- about damn time.

I don't think Rattrap was trying to be sexy. I doubt he even realized what was coming out of his mouth.

I wish "filthy Pred-lover" was meant as dirty talk, but I don't think it was. Rattrap, man. ISSUES.

Well, Rattrap bit his lip too. No matter what he uses to cover the vermin's mouth, it was bound to get chomped on. Dennis is driving.

Dinobot now has a new appreciation for what it feels like to Rattrap when people smack him. Seriously, nobody thinks of this stuff ( ... )

ultharkitty January 26 2010, 19:53:34 UTC

You got some damned fine description going on there :D

(and the characters, and their particular needs/desires/kinks are very well done :D)

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ianam1983 February 3 2010, 06:41:39 UTC

Well, thank you for finally reviewing. I never know who's reading or what they think unless they tell me, so I really appreciate it. Glad you're enjoying the fic. (And yes, they deserve each other in every sense of the phrase.)