yo mama

[icecolld]

I watch as you almost trip down the stairs, when I tell you your fly is undone. You cautiously turn around and attempt to look threatening, squinting your hazel eyes pointedly at me.

‘Teddy, this is NO time for jokes’ you say, still eyeing me suspiciously.

‘Les, easy, I just didn’t want you to get caught by the security cameras with your pants

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[kksss]

you never seem to have the ability to lose your illusion of perfection
too long and pointlessly wordy; i'd just get rid of 'have the ability to'

Rolex has one l =|

though more of as a reassurance
though as more of a reassurance ..

gold italic letters
italicised

dead at the bottom of reality
sorry to say, that bit sounds a bit too emo and doesn't really make sense, well i would change 'reality' to something else..

which oddly sounds like Hit Me Baby One More Time
'sounds oddly like' sounds better imo

I laugh out loud and sometimes sanity takes vacation time on me so I start doing it too
'...' instead of 'and sometimes'

brushing off the rain drops of my grey suit
brushing the raindrops off my grey suit sounds better

So they were pretty picky little things there but I guess that's what I notice - hope it helps! Anyway overall, it's great =D i loved it.

yeah i am tooooooootally trying to avoid hw. bahhhh.

whitay xo

[icecolld]

thanks man!
haha yeah the reassurance thing i didnt know how to phrase properly =P
and sorry about the rolex man, gotta know my brands better
anyway do your hw bitch!

ciao! haha hope youre still not smokin!

xx