sunday_reveries; It's broken.

[iceddiamond]

You know I want to give you everything you want. But I can't. It's broken. - The Notebook

regardsshe moves like fire, curling around him in the blank darkness of his bedroom. fire burns and snaps and consumes, and that's lena when he's with her, a stark contrast to her public face. drake pushes against her and she pulls him close, and he's just

Comments

[rattle_thecages]

I adored this piece, and the insight to their relationship.

Beautifully-written, as always. <3

[iceddiamond]

Thanks. Like I said, I had the vague idea and then it just sort of came (erm, no pun intended).

<333

OOC

[gotbottle]

This is really beautifully done. Very haunting and heartbreaking. I thought the lack of capitalization helped bolster the not-quite-real, not-quite-there feeling I got from the story itself.

Re: OOC

[iceddiamond]

Thanks. It's really only heartbreaking if you feel bad for Drake, and I'm not sure that you should. ;)

I'm glad the lack of capitalization worked. I tend to worry I'm being pretentious when I do stuff like that.

Re: OOC

[gotbottle]

It's well-established I feel bad for all KINDS of people who probably don't deserve it. Sometimes I get better. ;)

No, it totally worked. Not pretentious at all.