khr prompt #1; turn back the clock

[ideal_fairytale]

Title: turn back the clock
Rating: T
Word Count: 2404
Character(s): Tsuna
Pairing(s): TsunaXKyoko
Warnings: It seems I can't write angst to save my life.
Summary: It's an entirely different story when going backwards.

Comments

[aimeeshii]

Character Interpretation-9.

Grammar/Spelling-7. The errors were off putting at some points, but I could still read your story. It was interesting, that's for sure, but my picky nature became apparent.

Story Flow-11. It flowed quite smoothly. There were places where it seemed jumpy, making me have to scroll up again to read the section again to understand completely.

Prompt Usage-14. It fits well.

Originality-10. It was original in some areas, but there were others that were cliché. We all did something like that, apparently, especially involving Kyoko and the crush. The small sections that were the best were the detailed ones, I really enjoyed reading them.

Bonus-10.

Total-61.

[ideal_fairytale]

I think it was having to write individual memories that did me in for the flow. .__. It was difficult for me to try to connect them but that isn't really a good excuse as a writer. Yes, yes. Thanks for making me feel better by saying a lot of people did something like it. I'm surprised you liked the details and happy too. :D I'm... not good with details.

Thank you for reviewing. :)

[crysalice_bell]

Very lovely and touching :)

Character Interpretation: 9 [It's weird because the gimmick of the entire story is the list of scenes, but I still find the portrayal of some of the minor characters a little odd (I think it was Mukuro and Kyoko...) Though you wrote Tsuna wonderfully, no matter the age.]
Grammar/Spelling: 10 [A present tense fic is something I don't get to read often and this one was a joy to read.]
Story Flow: 17 [Since it is clearly stated as a countdown from the start, there's a predetermined expectation of the scenes, and going backwards was a cool way to do it. But I think they didn't all get equal development, and some scenes would have been more heart-wrenching with more description.]
Prompt Usage: 14 [I find it amusing how this fic is both a literal take and a jumble of the prompt "Memories; he looked back into the past" by listing down actual memories in reverse chronological order so it was indeed like 'looking back' as a reader. Creative and unexpected but in a good way :)]
Originality: 11 [Probably came from

[ideal_fairytale]

Asdf! I focused too much on Tsuna. ): Thank you! I don't like reading present tense fics most of the time, but when it's an angsty oneshot, I love it. It's more powerful to me? :D Thanks for liking the backwards thing. Yes I think I need more description too. It's a weak point of mine. I may practice some more on description on my own time before trying to do a fic like this again. A little better with dialogue~ I think that if I hadn't put that "Oo" part at the end, it wouldn't have really been a flashback, but more so a story that's simply going backwards! I'm glad you liked it. Mm... Originality is another weakness of mine. The reviewers have been real good about spotting that out (HQ reviewers~). Going off topic here... ANYWAY, yeah, I'll be wracking my brains some more ideas.

Your review has reminded me that I haven't reviewed for the rest of the stories yet, so thanks for that

[fuwacchi]

Character Interpretation: 10. You have Tsuna's character perfectly down.
Grammar/Spelling: 9, I didn't notice many mistakes.
Story Flow: 17, it was easy to read. No awkwardness or anything of the sort. The introduction, especially, left a big impact on me.
Prompt Usage: 15, you conveyed it really well. Probably the most clear of all the entries I've read.
Originality: 12, for the structure of the fic--working backwards--and including bits of and pieces of Tsuna's interactions with his Guardians throughout the years.
Bonus: 10, for including both Bonuses.

TOTAL: 73/80

[fuwacchi]

Your scores:
100paperfans - 74
ibuberu - 65
eclats_de_voix - 70
signifies - 72
lulu_xi - 57
aimeeshii - 61
crystalice_bell - 71
fuwacchi - 73

As not all participants have the same amount of reviews, we will be averaging out the highest three review scores to determine the winner.

Your highest scores:
100paperfans - 74
fuwacchi - 73
signifies - 72
Total: 219
Average: 73

Therefore, your average is 73 out of a possible 80.

Thank you for your participation!