Poetry- Cul-De-Sac Memories

[identity99]

Title: "Cul-de-sac Memories"
Rating: G
A/N: I wrote this about a night I had out with an unrequitted love. It was an amazing experience. :)

Comments

[your_ballerina]

See, my major problem with commenting on your writing is I don't know what to say without repeating myself! It's wonderful. One critcism though, "dearheart" stops the flow of the writing. Or it should be it's own line, it's own thought. Ya know? It's as if in that one word you are reflecting on the person the entire poem is about.

[identity99]

Well... The poem was about an ex love interest.. and my nickname for her was dearheart

[your_ballerina]

then it should be (in my opinion)

Let me assure you
Dearheart
At night it's you I dream of

[e_x_h_a_l_e]

i liked it :)