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ihrtmr March 20 2013, 21:08:44 UTC
Thank you. Glad you liked it. No other language here. Just broken english. REAL broken....

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ihrtmr March 20 2013, 21:11:49 UTC
This is the hard thing I'm finding with Love Bingo. These are supposed to be short stories, and I'm having a hard time with that. This is 3 times longer than it needed to be and I still feel like I could go on. I'm afraid the promising start is also the end. Unless I can manage a stand alone sequel using another prompt. Maybe.....

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laira26 March 20 2013, 22:05:15 UTC
Awww! I love your stories. This story is so lovely, funny and warm. It put me in a good mood after a long day at work :)

Loved Scotty and Jordan friendship, they are so funny. And Scotty in the shop is so cute. lol! I love how you write Scotty, you write him exactly as I expect. And I totally adore Scotty, so I tend to be very critical :)

The last part is perfect :) Now, you have to write this story from the POV of Kevin.

Thank you for writing. Missed your stories.

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ihrtmr March 20 2013, 22:51:55 UTC
Thanks Laura! Though you always find something positive to say, you always give such specific comments - and that's great to hear for a writer - so we'll know what's working and what you guys like. This prompt almost stumped me because I wasn't ABOUT to write a platonic love story between Kevin and Scotty. Nope!

I don't write dialogue for Jordan often, but it was fun.

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claire1968 March 21 2013, 19:25:47 UTC
This should be a part one of ... lol! I want more!

Amber liquid and 'the pleasure is all mine' makes me wonder if Kevin had recently taken a trip to Chinatown too and was sat there drinking his purchase?!

Thanks for 'picking up the pen' again!

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ihrtmr March 21 2013, 20:54:23 UTC
'Sat there drinking his purchase?!!!' They're gonna have a GOOD ole time tonight! Hilarious.

I was contemplating a part two using a different prompt, but the lack of readers has put some doubts in that plan.... Ehhh, I'll mull it over a few days and move on with the next story I need to edit....

You're welcome and thanks for your comments,

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scout_harper March 22 2013, 05:51:53 UTC
Hey...Your first story for love-bingo.Loved it.Scotty at the Chinese shop was hilarious.
'who me?'...lol...his embarrassment came across well.Kevin didn't notice him all these weeks.I don't believe it..lol...I think he was also gathering courage to talk to Scotty:)

Good start...how many do you have to write?If you write longer stories would they disqualify you?

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ihrtmr March 22 2013, 06:32:27 UTC
Haay! Glad you enjoyed it.

Well, I keep PMing that gal that puts these together. If I ask her anything else she's gonna shake me! So I'll refrain...

But from what I gather: To complete a bingo you need to have 5 stories (second one is posted if you're in a reading kind of mood)
You can get points for doing extra things, like another bingo line on the same card or one story using 4 prompts in a particular sequence
Or - you can do a blackout. A story for every prompt - but thats just CRAZY talk!
There is a minimum number of words (500), but so far as I can tell there is no posted maximum. So to answer your question, it appears my story can run on and on for days. If they disqualified me for that, I think it would be a first, but I wouldn't put it past me to manage to break the rules. LOL!

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marea67 March 25 2013, 09:02:56 UTC
Blackout-card doesn't have to too difficult. As you said, each story needs a minimum of 500 words. You just have to write shorter stories. ;) Or seperate chapters as I did last year (or was that 2 years ago). :)

Anyway, loved this one, had a good chuckle at his experience (he could be so me) and nice to see Jordan back.

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ihrtmr March 25 2013, 13:35:49 UTC
Ooooh, it seemed so overwhelming. (blackout)

They DO give us plenty of time though. I like short stories. I actually sort of prefer them. I just dont know if I can do one as short as 500 words. Not one that has much of a plot anyway. But yes, sure if they were shorter then the blackout would be more doable. I'll mull it over...

Glad you liked this. Jordan was so underutilized on the show, but a key player, I think. Esp. with Scotty being alone in LA, you want to think of him as having close friends he can trust..

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