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[ikillchipmunks]

stress is chewing on my brain like your mom chews on cheese. i need a nap so freaking bad

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[bluefragment]

Especially

iii.
there are a few places that i
would rather not go:
behind the toolshed. ten steps
into the woods.
behind you and your
simple crooked backbone.

and

this girl is not a whore. this girl is not
for sale. this is altogether not as artificial
as you are assuming. elaine’s round face.
when we went to the sea shore and she was sick
from the chowder. held her hair. she doubted my intentions.
see, this is no more/ hollow/

But I really liked it all. The beginning and the end, and the full circle.

[deepbluedepths]

hi riki.
i really liked all of this. your writing is oringinal. i think
"does she know that i only paint to obscure the space between us." "there are a few places that i would rather not go: behind the toolshed. ten steps into the woods. behind you and your simple crooked backbone." and " till the kisses were like dental work" thouse lines were my favorite... riki how are you doing? i was drinking orange juice when i read your first few lines in the post and i wanted to give you some :)
i hope everything is well. you're my favorite!
<3