new story ... untitled for now

[imastonedwriter]

She had that kind of rare beauty he didn’t see much at the bar. Dark hair, sparkling, almost sinister eyes of unspeakable depth, milky white skin, dimples in just the right places when she smiled. She had energy. No, that wasn’t it. It was true, but it wasn’t what made her stand out among the other women in the place. There was just something about

Comments

[anonymous]

YAY!! I'm so excited they turned out to be Vampires!

really cool

[thelonepigeon]

This has a lot of potential. I liked it, especially the twist at the end. The only prob I have with it is your dialogue is a little weak...I think I said the same about your witch stpry from oh so long ago. Other than that its good. Your descriptions in the the beginning are the best. Awesome-ly done.

Hooray for vamps!

Re: really cool

[imastonedwriter]

thank u some1 finally left a good comment haha i love u