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[imonlysleeping9]

Almond eyes, as spring wraps the earth
And softly displays the secret of life's renewal
And embraces it tightly to impress upon every hue
A more vibrant world than was known before
I am so deeply reborn in anticipation
Of your unnamed gaze O innocent love

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[imonlysleeping9]

Hmmm.. I really wanted to say this but I didn't like the way it was said. I'm going to save this just as an example of the sort of writing I should steer away from just a bit. The imagery is very... traditional. I didn't plagiarize, though! It's just that each poetic unit doesn't really bear too much expressiveness in itself, there are no points of rest in any particularly meaningful thought-images.. Maybe that's why it's easy to just gloss over and say "Oh, fine. Done." I'll have to re-write it sometime..

'Love annotating my own LJ posts!