Wanted: Beta Readers!

[imperatorzlarp]

Okay, I'll be honest, it's more like alpha readers. Well, even more honest: pre-alpha readers... Anyway, here's the mutton:

I recently started this novel project (modern day fantasy thingie idea that's been haunting me for about a year now) and I remembered all my other old novel projects. Well... to keep it simple: They all died, even though they

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[moeshas]

You know I did like it, there were just some sentences, which didn't really make sense in the way they were at first. But you took the critics to heart and it's now better. :o)
And I really want first read-rights. Yay.

[imperatorzlarp]

Okay, you'll be sent the first chapter today then. I'd say it should be fair game sending it off to other people tomorrow or on Friday when you've had time to read it first :P

[imperatorzlarp]

Yeah. Your critique also made me do away with the description of his "muscly legs". Thank you for that :P

[belenustenebrae]

I'll be happy to look at them as long as it's not 14'000 in one sitting, since I actually have to concentrate and that's hard.

Just, uh, don't count on me for punctuality or speed, 'cause I'm a late and lazy kinda person.

[imperatorzlarp]

Yay, awesome, thanks! I'll give Crashing Into Fate that one last readover and then it's off to the mail with it. The thing has nine scenes/chapters, so it should be reasonable with the "in one sitting" thing.

[imperatorzlarp]

Ack... you probably won't be getting it all that quick after all. I just got some feedback from a different source telling me I used the word "but" about 50 times. I just counted and it's just about true. This is serious, I seem to be way too in love with that word and it needs to go out out out... Now off to the editing cave you go, little FTH...

[imperatorzlarp]

Yay, another reader! Thanks you ^^

Now I really have to get my ass bent on editing that story so it's readable. That other comment I got didn't only complain about the overuse of buts, but also:

"I’d say that you need to evoke quite brutal editing to allow pace, tension and contrast to build. Also don’t feel you have to explain everything - just what the reader needs to stay with the story sequence. "

Which is kinda harsh, makes me reconsider the piece a lot, since those problems were exactly what I was trying to avoid...

[xxxdo]

If you want, I can review your work. Just not the steamy romance non-PG story *grin*
Sorry, my brain is too immature to handle reviewing that one.

But I'll gladly review anything else :)

And I still think you should join the YWS! (even though it's currently down for a week 'cause our awesome admin Nate is changing the website ^^) There are some very good reviewers there, and there's an Advanced Critiques forum for longer stories :)

Xxx

[imperatorzlarp]

Woo! Another one! Thanks a lot ^^ I'll be sending out the first chapters tomorrow since Moeshas should've had the opportunity (maybe not the time) to read it now :P

Sent you a message requesting your e-mail now, since I haven't got yours yet.

Oh, and too bad you decided you are immature, I just read over the Crashing Into Fate story (did lots of editing...) and decided I quite like it after all :P

[xxxdo]

*grin*

Allright, if you want you can send me the other story as well. I'll be mature about it ^^

Xxx

[imperatorzlarp]

I'm not sure I want to after what you've said about your maturity level. I'll see what other feedback I get first so you won't just point and laugh at me :P