Little Screens

[impoetry]

I…

You’d think they’d have a name for the moment when a good man, after a life of proper deeds, is actually ready to commit murder. For when the unforgettable letting go that sees him envision a throat crumpling in the might of his own hands instantaneously comes to life.  I’d call that moment “now”.

I wnn’t…From the second balcony in this hockey

Comments

[whipchick]

This is really powerful. I don't completely get how the guy with the phone at the concert ties into the daughter texting and driving, but the raw emotional power pulls me through as a reader.

[inteus_mika]

Tragic, heartbreaking. And so true.

[prog_schlock]

The device of slowly completing the text message is incredibly effective and visually evocative. I can imagine those words flashing or scrolling across a screen as the rest of your entry is performed or typed. Great choice there - well done.

I thought of this song, which doesn't address the death of a child, but does speak to careless death. You didn't specifically mention drunk driving, but that's the sense I got about the cause of death.

[murielle]

Well written, and totally relatable. Not that I would ever kill anyone over a smart phone, but there are times I think shoving one ...

Great read!