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[inabasket]

Title: Fifty Minutes to Reconsider
Author: inabasket
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Falsities galore.
Character(s): Adam Lazzara -- mentions of John and Michelle Nolan.
Word Count: 916
Prompt: antique (for spittingink )
Summary: Adam isn't considerate, which is why he is considering splattering his guts on the front of the train.
Warnings: Deals with suicidal thoughts. I

Comments

[xstunt_pilots]

and you say you WEREN'T low when you wrote this?

excellent personification and whatnot. but i don't think personification's the right word, but it's late and i'm too lazy to get up and go look it up. so, excellent whatever-the-word-is-but-i'm-sure-you-know-what-i-mean.

xjulia

[inabasket]

I think I'm just consistently morbid and cruel.

Do you mean characterization? In any case, thank you very much for the nice comment, haha. It's weird -- I blame my friend for making me like Adam suddenly.

[xstunt_pilots]

idk what i mean. BUT IT WAS GOOD! whatever it was... XD

[inabasket]

Oh! Well, thank you. Haha. For whatever you're saying. And, just in general, for reading.

[likeanaccidentx]

"You like him! You let him live!"

Haha. You already know I love this. Damn it, the fact that you show me everything totally ruins my comments, so let's pretend you didn't, mmkay? [and let's pretend I don't ask you to show me in the first place.]

I love it.

And I love you.

[inabasket]

Haha, well, you're so handy! I'm always talking to you moments after I write anything.

But yes, I love you too! I love having time to check my comments in the morning.

[likeanaccidentx]

Hahaha. Have a good day at schooool!
<3.

[...Yes. That was meant to be slightly cheesy, I swear.]

[_poetic_harlot_]

I second that. I do not approve of the ruining of the comment by sending stories along for checking. But...but nnn. Seriously, I just don't even know. It's such a weird, borderline unsettling feeling when you step back and think that the ending would've seemed a little happier if he had jumped in front of the train.

What a horrible thought, haha. But seriously, it just seems so undeniably sad that he just walks away, all crushed and whatnot, and telling time still matters. Heartstrings aching, kthnx. You did a phenomenal job with this. Reading through it again is juuust as painfully beautiful and. Ahh. I'll shut up now. I sound really dumb, haha.

[whatcircus]

But Kelly, you never sound dumb.

I am so glad this doesn't suck, haha. Actually. Like. I was reading this, and I'm so apprehensive about sad stories just because funny stories are easier to accept. So. I don't know.

[likeanaccidentx]

...I'm going to pretend that Kelly didn't just suggest that Lazzara should've jumped out in front of that train, mmkay?

=|.

[whatcircus]

Hypothetically! Like, he would've felt fulfilled! She didn't mean it. Just block out the bad noises.