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Prompt Post No. 9

Oct 15, 2010 00:00

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ex- 1/2 anonymous March 22 2011, 18:23:16 UTC

His name's Adam. Adam Barton. He's English, ridiculously so: Eton and Oxford and cricket and coats with leather elbow patches, like something out of the Thirties. Eames can't stand him. He likes to think he wouldn't be able to stand him anyway, because he loathes pretension - and that accent is pretension, no one under forty talks like that unless they're putting it on - but he's too old to lie to himself about something so obvious. It's Arthur. It's all about Arthur.

Eames can pin-point the exact moment when his casual contempt for the man turned to violent loathing. It was their second day on the job. Arthur came in after a coffee run and handed Barton his cup first, which was fine, normal - Eames has a hundred of Arthur's borderline OCD routines memorized, and one is that the architect always gets coffee first.

"Thanks," Barton said and took a sip, smiled. "Really, Arthur, your memory. This is perfect"Right," Arthur said, snorting. "Because remembering that you like soya lattes is such a feat of memory ( ... )

Re: ex- 1/2 rageprufrock March 22 2011, 22:14:07 UTC

HAHA I ADORE THIS SO FAR.

ex- 2a/2 anonymous March 23 2011, 00:20:35 UTC

Eames is well aware of Arthur's temper, the famously short fuse that can be lit by someone so much as looking at him the wrong way or saying "thanks, man" in the wrong tone of voice. He's expecting fireworks in response to his "fuck off". Hoping for them, to be quite honest - he needs to hit something, verbally or otherwise, and he he can't allow a fit of juvenile something to drive him into physically punching their architect when they're two days off completion. Getting into a row about nothing with Arthur, who always gives as good as he gets, whose precisely turned insults have Eames wincing and smiling weeks later, is safer - almost routine at this point. But Arthur doesn't snap. He just blinks, slow and perplexed.

"What," he says. "Eames? What the fuck?"

Barton's watching, eyebrows skewed at an infuriating angle. Eames feels himself flush hot with it, all this stupid, unexpected anger and disappointment and hurt, all with nowhere to go. Christ, he's overreacting. So Arthur turned him down because he didn't care for Eames in ( ... )

Re: ex- 2b/2 (end) anonymous March 23 2011, 00:24:17 UTC

Arthur gives the door a longing look and then looks back at Eames.

"I thought you were kidding," he says, his voice sounding suddenly smaller and younger. Shyer, almost, and Eames is suddenly light-hearted with possibility, with the startled, tentative hope that he can suddenly see in Arthur's expression. "All those times you - you always make it sound like you're kidding."

"I'm not," Eames says hoarsely and it's probably too early to explain how much he isn't joking, given how recent that discovery is even to himself, so he settles for putting a hand very lightly on the crook of Arthur's elbow, just above the fold of his rolled-up shirtsleeve. The cloth is fine linen, warm from his body. Arthur looks at his hand and then looks at his face ( ... )

Re: ex- 2b/2 (end) anonymous March 23 2011, 01:29:02 UTC

<3<3<3<3<3 Love this.

Re: ex- 2b/2 (end) anonymous March 23 2011, 01:43:11 UTC

and then Barton lights a fucking pipe

HAHAHHAHAHAHHA

and omg they'er so cute ♥

Re: ex- 2b/2 (end) alicia_jo March 23 2011, 02:19:57 UTC

I think jealous!Eames might be my favorite...or at least the way you write him is.

I don't think I can ever get enough of jealous/staking claim stories.

Re: ex- 2b/2 (end) anonymous March 23 2011, 03:46:54 UTC

This is lovely. :)

Re: ex- 2b/2 (end) sin_fuego March 28 2011, 22:51:22 UTC

This is wonderful! Such confusion on both their parts - glad you rectified that :)

Re: ex- 1/2 anonymous March 23 2011, 03:00:24 UTC

"Eames," Arthur said soberly, handing him his cup, and Eames was so startled that he took it silently, without so much as a thank you or a smile. He's been dazed silent ever since - sulking, frankly. He knows it's childish, but he can't stop.

A little concrit: Please don't switch tenses in the middle of the story, and especially in the middle of a paragraph like this. It's so jarring.

Re: ex- 1/2 anonymous March 23 2011, 03:11:11 UTC

Thank you for the concrit. But how else would you suggest I write flashback scenes? It's easier if most of the story is in the past tense, because the switch from past to past perfect and back again seems smoother, but I believe you aren't supposed to use the past perfect in a story told primarily in the present. Maybe I should have included a paragraph break to indicate the end of the flashback? I'll make a note of that for future stories, thanks.

Re: ex- 1/2 bookshop March 23 2011, 21:38:58 UTC

Hi, hi! I loved this fic. :D :D :D :D I STILL WANT TO PUNCH ADAM (UGH, "ADAM") IN THE FACE. CAN THERE BE A SEQUEL WHERE EAMES PUNCHES HIM IN THE FACE, THAT WOULD BE AWESOME.

Your usage of past tense was totally correct in this case. A lot of people when writing present tense will actually us the past perfect instead of the simple past to indicate the further past (just as you'd do if you were writing a narrative in past tense); but that's not technically correct. Technically the way you wrote it was exactly right. You set it up with clear temporal transitions and then phased back into the present again.

So, yeah, good job. *fistbump*

and i really loved Arthur in this. Not asking you to de-anon, but have you written more fills anywhere you'd be okay with sharing?

Re: ex- 1/2 solvent90 March 23 2011, 23:52:51 UTC

I am TERRIBLE at anonymity, so. *de-anons sheepishly, as I would have done it anyway* thank you! I'm glad Adam was appropriately infuriating :D And thank you for the reassurance on the grammatical point; I second-guess myself about grammar quite often, so I'm glad of that.

I've filled a few prompts on the meme but most of them are still WIPs (linked here) - the ones I've finished are the experiment (warning for consensual graphic enactment of rape fantasies) and discovery (which is a rom-com AU, basically). There are a few other bits and bobs that I'll tidy and post to my LJ eventually, but those are the main ones.

Re: ex- 1/2 bookshop March 24 2011, 03:19:04 UTC

:D :D :D omg hi. I faithfully read and squealed and have reread both of those fics multiple times, so this is a completely delightful non-surprise, OF COURSE IT'S YOU, omg omg. brb stalking the hell out of those WIPs. THANK YOU. <3

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