NanoWriMo story: Kalon: Chapter one

[indefiance]

Because a few people have expressed interest in reading my NanoWriMo story, I'm posting the first chapter and a part of chapter two. Please give me any constructive feedback you may have; in fact, they would be very much appreciated.

Comments

[wayfares]

/reads

[indefiance]

Haha nooo. It's such a rough draft, and I'm probably re-writing it all after, lol.

[wayfares]

That's the entire point of Nano, after all!

I'm no critic, and I'm afraid I can't offer much in the way of constructive critism, but I really did enjoy reading your story! Kalon's such a strong, tough person ;///; That tiger bit is really interesting, and asdfjkl; I can't wait to read the rest of the story. I don't know if I've told you before, but your summary is the tops, really. The only thing I'd have to find fault with is probably some minor grammar stuff, but that's most probably open to debate.

[indefiance]

Oh man. I don't even want to think about grammar because I didn't even check for it or anything. But thank you, bb. ^//^ The funny thing is, I'm planning a massive re-write and I hate what I currently have because it's not my normal prose. It was super forced.

[eternal_moonie]

Absolutely LOVE this start honey! *hugs*

[commen_sense]

oh hun I LOVE this. I am telling you-you need to be less hard on yourself. I love the way you've established Kalon's character. I instantly liked her and the plot itself sounds brilliant. This is going to be great, I'm sure. :)