Gift!fic for mikochan_noda: Fall Into Your Sunlight

[indira14]

Fandom: Naruto
Summary: Memories keep the mind company. The body remembers its way back home.
Genre: General/Angst
Word Count: 3,045
Characters: Haruno Sakura, Uchiha Sasuke
Warning: 2nd person, present tense
A/N: When I started writing this last year, I never thought it'd turn into something like this. You do not give a wonderful person depressing

Comments

[fade_in2_dreams]

why is this too damn perfect . This is probably one of the best pieces I've read so far in the fandom, everything about it is just amazing. From the pov from which is written, the imagery, and that lovely dream-quality it has...it's just perfect. thanks for sharing <3

[indira14]

O///O

I'm--- I mean, nobody's ever called my writing perfect before, so um. jdsfblbagkfgn. THANK YOU. & hearts. Lots of them. 8D

Imagery was definitely the hardest part of this--- some sentences got a little too purple at times, which almost gave me a heart attack because they were imperative if I was ever going to achieve that dream-quality.

That was what I was going for, actually: time passing by like a dream. I'm so glad you picked up on it! ;__; My mission has been accomplished. :D

[fade_in2_dreams]

& you succeeded wonderfully! It was a treat to read! You deserve all the compliments you can get :)

[indira14]

Lol~! You're making me blush. Happy New Year, darling!! :D

[unicorn_paige]

Damn. Just damn.

I love that touch of surrealism that the second person POV gives to this. Absolutely wonderful! And I really enjoyed the glimpses of Sakura and Tsunade's relationship. This line, especially:

You realize that Tsunade does do it on purpose - dishing out tough love because she has tough luck and nothing has ever really gone her way; she isn’t about to let you follow in her footsteps and develop blisters on your feet because you’re still too young, her eyes say.

Sasuke's return in the beginning was really great, too. I'm glad you showed that and then backed up and switched into Sakura's POV. It really tied it all together at the end.

Beautiful story!
Memming ♥

[indira14]

Aww, thank you~♥ I have no idea where the second person POV came from - I was writing before I knew it and when I looked back, major panic ensued because, "damn it, just how often is 2nd person POV even written" and "what were you thinking, brain? D:"

But I guess braving the possibility of potential "What. What is that even supposed to be. Are you seriously writing this." reactions were worth it<33 I'm glad it worked for this piece, and bought that, uh, ~surreal~ feel to it as well./relieved

Tsunade-Sakura mentor-student relationship is something I've always wanted to explore - because in that respect even Lee and Gai get more spotlight and they're not even main characters. Kishimoto treats his women excellently, doesn't he? :/

I'm so glad that Sasuke's scene worked for you - before sirona_gs got to it, it was horrible. ;__; Sakura's POV was easier to write.

It really tied it all together at the end. - Since there's a conclusive tone to it, so I probably won't turn this into a multi-chapter, as I had originally planned. Or maybe I will

[unicorn_paige]

Definitely worth it! I thought you wrote second POV beautifully. ^_^

Ugh, yeah. Kishimoto's frustrating when it comes to his female characters. I especially hate the way he treats Sakura. He's given her so much potential, but he doesn't use it! Gah, drives me nutters!

Ha-ha, well if you do decide to turn it into a multi-chapter, I'm sure it'll be great! You've set up a really interesting beginning to a Sasuke returns fic. ♥

Daww, shucks! I'd love to be friends. ^///^

[indira14]

Sakura--- ;__; I feel so sorry for her, poor girl. You're so right: Kishimoto has given her so much potential (hell, he's given her the strength of a dinosaur, dammit) and yet, all she seems to be good for is crying and being helpless and generally failing (and not even in the adorable way that Hinata fails. Kishimoto has issues with Sakura, definitely). >8(

I want the Sakura that Grandma Chiyo saw so much potential in, the Sakura that showed Sasori just who was boss and the Sakura that was Naruto's rock when he broke down crying. But, le sigh. :'(

2010 has certainly not been the kindest year to Sakura at all. :/

We'll see about the continuation~ XD I hope things go well for you this year, paige, because my New Year was definitely full of sparkles~

Happy New Year!♥

[hesifuss]

Beneficial info and excellent design you got here! I want to thank you for sharing your ideas and putting the time into the stuff you publish! Great work!

[indira14]

Ahh, thank you, I guess. Looking back on this piece I wonder what the hell I was thinking when I wrote it. XD

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