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Aug 18, 2007 00:40

Characters: Claude/Nathan; implicit Claude/Peter and Nathan/Peter, sorta ( Read more... )

nathan, heroes_fic, heroes, one_offs, heroes_slash, claude, angst, rare_heroes, fic

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entangled_now August 18 2007, 09:21:18 UTC
This is so very good, it comes out beautifully...I love the contrast between Nathan and Peter running through the whole thing...the bits I like seem to change every time I read it. I'm quite attached to Claude's guilt over wishing Peter had the flavours of his brother that would have saved him now.

no acknowledgment that this might be about two people.

Which is fair, since it isn't.

Just one.

And this...which is lovely and painful!

They both come through perfectly...you can really see Nathan now, all the little tiny reactions and looks add to it all. Great stuff!

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indyhat August 18 2007, 09:29:51 UTC
.the bits I like seem to change every time I read it.

You put the "fic" back into "fickle" ;) Just kidding! I'm immensely grateful for your help and feedback with this.

I'm quite attached to Claude's guilt over wishing Peter had the flavours of his brother that would have saved him now.

Yeah, that just sort of snuck in there when I was writing (no design). Happy to hear that it works.

They both come through perfectly...you can really see Nathan now, all the little tiny reactions and looks add to it all.

Thank you - really appreciate the help, with that point especially, and I'm glad if I've managed to haul it up a bit.

Cheers! :)

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entangled_now August 18 2007, 12:04:03 UTC
You put the "fic" back into "fickle"

Without doubt I do! I'm horribly fickle! Though I'm perfect happy to see grumpy Claude at any point in time...more grumpy Claude please (and possibly amused Claude or obnoxious Claude too, both of which are good.)

It's great like this now, there's a lovely see-saw between Claude and Nathan. I was totally happy to help, no problem at all...

Lol and about the above comment... They wouldn't dare put what I've written on television! Though maybe this is why they can't have them meet in the series...all the testosterone and inappropriate fight!sex would be unavoidable... *dreams crushed*

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indyhat August 18 2007, 15:11:55 UTC
more grumpy Claude please (and possibly amused Claude or obnoxious Claude too, both of which are good.)

Yeah, I have to write more of all of those. <3 Claude.

They wouldn't dare put what I've written on television!

We are all the poorer for that :(

maybe this is why they can't have them meet in the series...all the testosterone and inappropriate fight!sex would be unavoidable... *dreams crushed*

Tim Kring so needs someone to show him the error of his ways.

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fantasticpants August 18 2007, 14:14:53 UTC
Oh wow. This is wonderful. Beautifully written, perfect characterizations, and a very raw feel to the whole thing.

I love how it's all about Peter. It makes a lot of sense this way.

I was gonna pull a line, but it's the same one a bunch of people already quoted (I IZ TEH ORIGINALZ!). It really just nails it.

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indyhat August 18 2007, 14:58:06 UTC
I'm so glad you like it! :D

And yeah, it was always going to be about Peter. The other Claude/Nathan I'm writing (which has gone off the boil a bit, but maybe I'll get it back) is all about Peter too, though perhaps more explicitly.

Which line was that? The one about it not really being about two people?

So pleased you liked :)

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fantasticpants August 18 2007, 15:16:49 UTC
Yeah, I suppose it's hard for this ship to work any other way, especially in the post S1 timeframe.

Yup, that line. :P

Mrrf, I'm trying to get into some writing rhythm (nearly impossible with looming exam), and I haz teh feerz that I lost my muse. Or the ability to form coherent sentences.

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indyhat August 19 2007, 10:07:25 UTC
Well, maybe someone bribed your muse to sod off for a few days so you could study ;)

Seriously, don't worry. There's no way in hell you can't go more than a week or two without thinking up something else. Take the time, study, and you'll come back to writing all the fresher.

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cucumber_k August 18 2007, 17:56:28 UTC
This is so awesome! I bow to you, lady, I could never write a believable Claude/Nathan. And they didn't punch each other even once.

Can't wait to see what else you can do with this pairing ;)

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indyhat August 19 2007, 08:42:07 UTC
Thank you, dear! Glad you liked it :)

And they didn't punch each other even once.

LOL! I can't promise the same for my other fic ;)

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apsik September 26 2007, 11:24:26 UTC
Ah, the torture... Good fic. Poor Claude. Poor Nathan.

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indyhat September 26 2007, 12:30:47 UTC
You're back! :)

Thank you ... I haven't even looked at this fic for a couple of months so it was nice to reread it for myself! I'm glad you enjoyed it (though honestly I'm not sure that "enjoyed" is the right word ... ;)

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