!!!!!!!NEWEST VERSION OF MY ESSAY TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK!!!!!!!!!

[ineedspeed]

Once again I am posting my college essay but THIS IS THE NEW NEW NEW ONE SPECIFICALLY FOR WWU. Please read it and give comments, questions and suggestions!

The Mechana-programa-neer Instead of going out and playing ball with friends, spending time with the girl I like, or sometimes, even instead of bathing, eating, or sleeping, I exercise my

Comments

[zippotheorist]

i think you might loose people in the description of project X.. i duno if you should tone it down, or use more precise wording, but when you hit that paragraph it consumes those interested in the topic, but may distract from the rest of the paper for those who are not

[zippotheorist]

it is probably important to keep most of it because it is also quite apparant that you are extrordinarily passionit about project x