[Fanfiction]: And Yet I Scream, Chapter 02 (Moonchild)

[inkcharm_666]

Title: And Yet I Scream
Part: 2 / ?
Warnings: angst
Rating: R
Pairings: hints of Kei/Sho and Kei/Yi-Che
Disclaimer: Moonchild does not belong to, nor do its characters or anything else related to the movie. I make no profit out of this story, it is written merely for fun and entertainment of other fans. Yadda yadda.

Summary: Sleep only brings nightmares

Comments

[heavenly90]

Then again, hopes are foolish in themselves. Hopes create expectations and expectations lead to disappointments.

I really liked that line. I think everyone believes this, but try to ignore that fact when it comes to hope.

As for Kei, gah! If poor Kei was fitting last chapter, than I don't know what fits this now! Speechless, really. Great chapter, and looking forward to the next!

[inkcharm_666]

Thank you so much for your feedback.
It was important to me to include the line about hopes. I believe hoping is something we just can't help doing, and yet we are disappointed ever so often.
Yes, Kei is having a rough time indeed. I feel very sorry for him ^^

[tsuki_626]

as dark and painful as this storyline is, i have to admit that i am enjoying reading this series. it's a unique take on a story that had become almost too familiar. plus, i like your style. and while i was intrigued before, this last bit has hooked me for sure. definitely looking forward to more, so please don't stop before you reach the conclusion. ^_^

[inkcharm_666]

I'm glad you enjoy AYIS. Personally, I really enjoy taking a twist in a familiar storyline even more than I enjoy writing about something that we all saw on screen.

I have no intention of stopping, don't worry. There will be lots more of this storyline!

[lovelydagger23]

I am hooked to this story, the style, and emotion put into it. I kind of don't want it to end. XD

[inkcharm_666]

Thanks for your feedback. Don't worry, it won't end for quite a while ;)

[silveryxdark]

I want to quote the entire chapter. The chapters just get better and better, and everything is so well-described. I especially like the way you describe Kei's memories and emotions.

I'm really intrigued at the end - it makes me wonder if there really is somebody else there, and if so, who.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter (:

[inkcharm_666]

Thanks for the feedback. I'm glad to hear that the story is still improving and that you like it.
I'll try not to let you wait too long for the next chapter. I'm trying to go for weekly updates, but just how good I'll be able to keep that schedule I'll have to see.

[plain_ornament]

now, how did i know that you wouldnt give any solution to any of the teasers you left me with in this chapter! XP

one wonderful chapter again. there were many lines that made me think for quite a while. i loved especially the part where kei contemplates both his reactions toward sho and yi-che. there are few authors who actually pick up on the flirtation going on between kei and yi-che, im happy you did :) it was touching to read how he was torn between both, while none of it seems farfetched or exaggerated the way you wrote it.

another part that gave me chills was kei remembering his victims in such a clear way.

now all i want to know is whose voice this is! doesnt feel like any of his friends...
gah! hurry up xD
*huggles*

[inkcharm_666]

Me giving solutions to teasers in the second chapter? Nah, way too early ;) But I think you might get a solution in chapter three... at least for one of the teasers I sent you.

I love the mild flirting going on between them. To me, the interaction between Yi-Che and Kei always felt like a big might-have-been - the potential was definitely there, but there were too many obstacles in their paths. And Sho himself seemed to know that in the end, he was always her second choice.

I like to imagine that someone laden with guilt as Kei would never be able to forget a victim. He seems too horrified by his own actions to not remember.

I'll try to get chapter three done quickly ;)

[plain_ornament]

might?! you know, this isnt even about my curiousness (nuuuh...), its mostly about you and tormenting kei with bodyless ghost-voices and me being forced to intervene should you take this too far! *points an accusing finger at you*

exactly. im still waiting for the day i'll find a moon child fanfiction devoid of all slash and yaoi, which instead concentrates on that might-have-been relationship bewteen kei and yi-che and shos reaction to this.

taken aside keis deranged, guilt-laden mind, i admire him for his long memory! (i have a memory like a sieve, especially when it comes to recognizing faces *coughs*)

<3

[inkcharm_666]

I love you too *tries to distract from matters at hand*

Hm... hmmmmmm.... NOW you've given me an idea. Ohoho... dear me, that is one plot-bunny gnawing at my ankles right now. Might just be you won't have to wait all that long.

My memory is very picky. I do remember some faces of people that just passed me by on the street years ago, I can quote from conversations I've had, books I've read, movies I've seen years ago - and then I forget other things within minutes. My mind is weird like that.

*goes to ponder plot-bunny some more*

You DO realize that you might have delayed chapter three just now, right? *evil grin*