revision on daisy.

[inkrevelations]

ok, I took some people's advice. Whaddya think? (its likey that there will be more revisions tonight. ugh.

Comments

[porcelain_me]

It's getting better. Looking forward to seeing what else you plan to do with it.

[ninjakirby]

I think that looks a lot better. The pretty/ugly dress was a great idea and I like the stolen money, not something I would have thought of. Looks good.

there are a couple typos in scene two such as
His eyes go wide again and she stares at the wall and begins to rock back and forth."
so don't leave those in. =p