Title: She Kisses Harder (1/5)

[inmyth]

Title: She Kisses Harder
Author: inmyth
Pairing: Original male/male slash
Genre: Romance, Drama
Rating: R
Summary: Ryan and Craig have been best friends since the day Craig whacked Ryan's face with a bucket when they were both four-years-old. Now as the years have piled on, so have Ryan's feelings for Craig. Will Craig accept Ryan's affections or will

Comments

[noa_luna]

If that title was inspired by Maria Mena's song 'Your glasses' you are psychic.

[inmyth]

It was indeedy! xD!

[noa_luna]

*jaw drops* That song is my Susan/Harry song!

[inmyth]

OMG really?! That's always been my Draco/Harry/Ginny one! Like, Draco pining away cos Harry's with Ginny and not a threesome!

[saracakes]

I actually like this!
I really liked how you were kind of putting the story and his thoughts in at the same time. (Does that even make sense? xD)

but yeah. Nice work! :D Not really good at the constructive criticism, but it's all good! :P

+ I totally agree with saerabbande.

Ahaa, I'm also Arab. ^^ I was laughing at lot at the Egyptian perve thing. Me and my friends use it all the time too. XD!

The story is very classic. Though it's still good, everyone has their differences. I've read many fictions going along this plot. Still good, still good.

A lot of people might not be familiar with the term, 'bum boy', though I am. Maybe put it in a simpler sentence, but not too simple like, "I like it up the ass." Haha. I think saying that he's gay is enough. :P

Hope to read more soon, you're going a great job at writing! :)

[inmyth]

Hey, sorry for replying so late. Was away on holiday. Anyhow, I'm glad you liked this and thank you for commenting. Heh, a fellow Arab! I don't know why they turn out to be Egyptian... or Saudi Arabian, sometimes.

I've put up the second part already :).

[saracakes]

Alright! I shall go take a look.

Yes, a fellow Arab :P
I live in the U.A.E. so, hey neighbor! LOL!
yeah, I don't get that, I think it's cause they're like...scary. :/ xD

[inmyth]

OH MY GOD!

I just got back from Dubai today. Wow!

[ks_darkstorm]

Absolutely love this so far, interesting start.
I'm really looking forward to the other chapters.
Amazing, update soon!

[inmyth]

Hee. Thank you. Second part is up :).

[lordjohnston]

A superb story, very well done indeed. Looking forward to the future instalments with great anticipation. The pace is just right as is the style it is written in, first person is so very hard to get right but you have done just that.

[inmyth]

Thank you so much for your kind words. I've, well my beta reader rather, had put up the second part if you'd like to hop on over.

[bobfirez]

OOOH I LUV THIS SO MUCH! It's really well written and better than some of the published works i've read. ROCK ON!