in distrust of movements

[inthisquiet]

jill bliss is my new favorite artist

Comments

[thelastthinker]

I appreciate your writing (to the point where I plan on returning for future posts), but I would like you to know that there are a few things I believe you should take interest to in it.

I think it is necessary for you to determine purpose in your writing. Yes, it is clear that your writing is about things that have come to mind in recent time, but try to elaborate and develop your thinking. Take a stance rather than make obvious observations. You'll be quite pleased with the result and quality of you work if you decide to do more than rationalize your thought. There is no doubt that you have begun upon several good points. However, upon further inspection it's actually quite evident that you haven't said much - your meaning is lost in your word choice. You start great ideas, but have no conclusions; you are, in essence, a critical spectator - the type that watches as empires crumble and worlds implode.

I hope this helps.

[inthisquiet]

is this critique based off of this post alone or others?

i used to love to write. i used to pour all out all the
time. i took stands left and right. but im all worn out.
thats why i dont elaborate; a few words are all i can
muster. once i get to my destination and rest, i will
find my voice again.

thanks for your thoughts.

[thelastthinker]

Solely this post. I've just finished writing quite a long rant myself, and will read some others of yours tomorrow.