[Fanfiction] Any Jrock Pairing-Oneshot-Utterance

[inuoloz]

Title: Utterance
Chapters: Oneshot
Author: inuoloz [Oloz-san]
Genre: Fluff
Warnings: Vague, Short, Sad, Creative English
Rating: PG
Pairings: Meant to be ReitaXRuki but it could be anyone...
Disclaimer: Yeah, yeah, I have Reita locked away in my basement and Ruki's sitting right next to me helping me write more smut... No I don't own them.
Summary:

Comments

[maunetjeret]

This was really beautiful. The last paragraph is heartbreaking.

[kawasakininja]

I like how you painted the moment, especially the image of Ruki and Reita singing together. I love when Reita sings back vocals to Ruki, so this fit in nicelly That hard tone of yours complimenting the softness in mine. I don't know did you notice, but it was mostly present tense and from here I sighed a giggle you suddenly switched to past tense. It was bit distracting. I like the surprise in the end, how he startles awake after "I love you". (Btw, it is shut not shutted eyes.) I found last two lines sad and lovely A quivering hand travels alongside my bed. Venturing to the spot where you used to sleep. Overall, I like the idea of the piece.

[micukofelton]

I loved it, it was beautiful. Even the last paragraph *sighs* I should stop reading sad fics 'cause they usually make me sad, tsk tsk, but it's Reituki, so I just had to read it, and I'm glad I did~ XD

[silveryxdark]

I thought that was lovely, but heartbreaking in the end. It was wonderful. ♥

[sakura_cloud]

Beautiful!
:)
The imagery was great, yeah, you did change tense, but otherwise it was great!