Moss on Stone -- Chapter 05

[invisiblehabits]

Title: Moss on Stone
Chapter: 05/05
Author: invisiblehabits
Beta: tingedwords
Genre: Angst/Light romance
Rating: R
Warnings: Implied malexmale sex, suicide attempt, terminal illness, violence, character death
Pairings: Kenzo/Hiroto, Tora/Hirot, Aki/Kenzo
Disclaimer: Don’t own, don’t know. Won’t make money unless you feel like paying me to read.
Summary: He didn’t want to go

Comments

[velvet_liquor]

That was beautiful. Like really beautiful. The whole story. Everything. Seeing Kenzo finally opening up to someone is a good thing. Twelve years of loneliness finally coming to an end. It makes me smile. I didn't cry through this one, but I'm positive I would have if I had read the five chapters in one go. Tora's words to Hiroto when he felt it was the end... They were quite heartbreaking é.è
And Kenzo's parents' lack of understanding amazes me. And horifies me. That's just.... Wow...

The ending was pretty, Kenzo being a bit naughty was cute =] at least, he smiles now~ you did a good job honey <333 =D

[invisiblehabits]

LOL! I'm glad you smiled instead of cried, even though I cried helplessly writing this, haha!

Tora loved Hiroto more than anything else, felt indebted to him in more ways than he could ever express. His words were meant to make sure Hiroto never ended up like Kenzo, because as much as Tora hated leaving him behind he would hate to see Hiroto so broken even more.

As for Kenzo's parents....I seriously don't think I've ever hated anything or anything I've created as much as I hate them. They are vile!

You're right, he is smiling now. And he's beginning to unfold, crack open the adamant shell he's built up around himself. It'll be a painstakingly slow process, but if anyone can help him through it and actually reach into him again I think it's Pon. ^^

Thank you darling!! I'm glad you enjoyed the end of this! <333

[suslik_san]

I'm sure, the amount of tears you've squeezed out of the readers would be enough to flood Europe and there is not a single mawkish sentence in it
take no offense, please, I'm just admitting the fact ^^V

you've made a decent job out of this
though I think you could do a better ending, this one was a little bit ..mm.. rushed? blurred?
Or maybe my vision is a blurred, idk tbh

I'm sorry for such a messy comment, I'm so tired I can barely process what I'm typing -_-
anyway, thanks for sharing, this was funinteresting to read ♥

[invisiblehabits]

*blushes* Well yeah, I do like the whole 'this is so sad I must bawl' thing... Angst is my thing, hehe. *sweats*

I'm glad you're okay with it, and in a way it is rushed. Slowly rushed or whatever. I realised I could not bring them all the way, that'd just been too far ahead and I know I would've lost track of it long before it could be finished then. And in my opinion it would've been even more rushed to throw them into bed now just for the sake of it. So yeah, this is where their tale ends. koboshi_ichigo called it anticlimactic and I think that's a pretty good word for it actually. Hope you're not too disappointed.

No no, thank you for commenting! And I do hope you get some sleep, I know all about being too tired at the moment... ♥

[suslik_san]

omg, are you admitting that you're fond of making us cry? how mean of you! I demand a free set of tissues for everyone XD

And making you bring them all the way would be sadistic) Well, what I'm trying to say is I like the idea of anticlimatic ending, it suits the whole story. There's just something out of place in the last few paragraphs otherwise this chapter is great<3 and throwing them into bed would be HORRIBLE! O_O I mean, come on Kenzo held his celibacy both mental and physical for 12 years - there must be some additional psychological issues and barriers in that. You can't just skip them.

I'm sorry I tend to be rude and persistent when it comes to commenting, and I can't help it unless I'm asked to shut up ^^" Sorry!

And no, I'm not disappointed, it's still a beautiful story.

[invisiblehabits]

LOL! NO! I'm....I'm....damnit. *places massive box of tissues in the middle of journal* I love angst and sadness, guilt and grief and irreparable emotions and events, like death... *sweats*

I would never ask you to shut up! If anything I'm glad you're being honest! Don't feel bad about these comments, definitely not! If you ever figure out what it is you feel is out of place, please tell me, I would consider it constructive criticism. Admitted I do have a problem handling criticism, but I want to learn to deal with it and if given in a good way it is very helpful. Lol, constructive even, as it should be. ^^

And I'm glad you find it beautiful! <3

[roses_areblue]

Is this the end? No smut?
Thanks for updating : )

[invisiblehabits]

Yes, it's the end. Without smut. Hence the 'hope you are not too disappointed' part. Well the lack of smut and the fact this story could, hypothetically, be taken further. It just wouldn't make sense to throw them into bed at this point, and I do not have it in me to bring them all the way to where they could believably have sex and not part afterwards, because I believe that lies at least months, if not years, into the future.

[roses_areblue]

Yes, i agree with that. You are right. Heheheh....
Anyway, thank you for this beautiful fic. Please write more : )
Btw, who is the guy on ur banner?
TQ...

[invisiblehabits]

I will write more, I can definitely promise you that! Not sure how soon (I am writing, I promise) or how good, but there will be more writing from me. Haha.

The guy in my banner would be the one and only Kenzo, drummer of AYABIE. Currently the King of Hearts for me. He's gorgeous, drowning in attitude, smokes way too much, and so complex I think it's impossible to figure him out unless you obsess about him intensely for years like koboshi_ichigo has done. Hehe.

He's also the guy in my current default icon. *nods*

[musicalmimicry]

Words escape me. Completely.

For now.

But I did try to explain how this made me feel. Here babe, I love you!

http://musicalmimicry.livejournal.com/9315.html

-- Aki

[invisiblehabits]

*speechless*

Darling...that's the most epic 'comment' ever! <333

[govi_chan]

at first I didn't even want to read this, because I hate to think about any of them being dead while they are thankfully not.
But I must say it was very good story. I cried a lot while reading, totally seeing them. It was just too emotional, sometimes even hard to read. And the part where Kenzo was telling about Aki's death I was so angry with his parents.
But I love it in the end. And the final part with Pon and Kenzo slowly getting deeper to each other, it was kinda sweet.

♥ to you

[invisiblehabits]

I'm so happy you enjoyed the story in the end! I do hate to think of them as dead too, tbh, but I love writing them sad and broken... And that makes me sound entirely too sadistic, but it's true. I don't know why, but I do.

Kenzo's parents...I hate them, they are vile in every way, shape and form! But I'm glad you like the ending. I had no idea how to end this story, but to me this seemed fitting. There's hope in this ending, and there hasn't been a lot of hope before...

Thank you so much! ♥