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invisibletosee

CHAPTER THIRTY SEVEN

Dec 29, 2003 20:12

The first thing that Draco was conscious of was pain: a host of aches and twinges both sharp and dull were throbbing insistently and demanding his attention, and for a puzzled moment he wondered whether he'd fallen off his broom, or been attacked by another one of Hagrid's pets. ( Read more... )

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ex_ajhalluk585 December 30 2003, 20:53:13 UTC

"Well, I, for one, can believe it's not butter,"

Oh, bless his devious little cotton socks! So can I ! In fact, the first time I was introduced to this substance (by the husband of the woman who introduced my mother to the step-mother of Ian McKellen, if you take my meaning, by the way) my response was considerably less polite. Ugh! Nassty greasssy yellow paste! We hates it, we hates it, yess!"

ex_ajhalluk585 December 31 2003, 20:10:32 UTC

but Harry Potter had never, to Draco's knowledge, intentionally harmed another person.

Technically speaking, he casts Cruciatus on Bellatrix, Draco's aunt, in OoTP. Though Lucius might not have mentioned it.

"It's just the toaster," said Harry, getting to his feet. "Muggle technology. Crappy Muggle technology, designed to either burn bread or not-quite toast it.

Yes, indeedy deed. Heh!

invisibletosee January 1 2004, 09:59:49 UTC

Very true, and this confirms that Harry has the potential to be a shit - but I've decided to ignore OotP out of hand, because I was already 3/4 of the way through this before it came out. Which, I suppose, makes this something of an AU. Hmm.

Toasters. WHY? Why have all these insane settings? I watched Kate and Leopold with La Diva when I was in LA, and I must confess that this point was made by Mr Ackman's unwillingly anachronistic character, and greeted by me with rather more in the way of noisy agreement than was strictly neccesary. But it's so true! Every time you DO have to put the damned toast in twice! EVERY time it's underdone the first time, and then you have to pop it back up half way through the second time to stop it from burning. It's insane!

...here endeth the rant. In the event that I do ever get the sequel off the ground, it will involve quite a lot of Wizards-among-the-Muggles. Draco amuses me vastly in the Muggle world.

not_vacillating January 1 2004, 18:57:31 UTC

In the event that I do ever get the sequel off the ground, it will involve quite a lot of Wizards-among-the-Muggles. Draco amuses me vastly in the Muggle world.

Fay. You now have to start this sequel. NOW. *end scary stalker mode*

I've read more than one hint, and they are starting to sound most intriguingly wonderful. If there's anything I can do to make it easier, I am your willing slave. Please, Fay. Please.

not_vacillating December 31 2003, 20:23:58 UTC

He tried very hard not to think about the fact that, in a parallel universe where he was a little bit less conscientious he would be upstairs having sex with Draco right now.

The comma is this sentance worries me, though I can't quite put my finger on where it should be. Or whether it should have a friend.

Anyway-- I still love this fic. Even if Justin betrayed meDraco. For some reason, the image of Draco dealing with a Muggle kitchen is lovely; mind you, it's entirely possible that 'characters who come face to face with ordinary things they utterly don't understand' is one of my kinks, as I gave him a television set to play with in my last fic.

*forces self back to topic*

Good old Hedwig! *passes mouse*

anna_blue December 31 2003, 23:37:59 UTC

He tried very hard not to think about the fact that, in a parallel universe where he was a little bit less conscientious he would be upstairs having sex with Draco right now.

It bugged me too, and then I think I figured it out: it leaves a subclause open.
Better would be:He tried very hard not to think about the fact that, in a parallel universe where he was a little bit less conscientious, he would be upstairs having sex with Draco right now.

not_vacillating January 1 2004, 09:09:27 UTC

I thought that too, at first; but the parallel universe bit it important to the sentence: the test for a subclause (as I was taught it) is "can you leave it out ( ... )

invisibletosee January 1 2004, 11:03:28 UTC

(You know, doing grammar is much more fun when your examples are more interesting. I'm just saying.)

You're not wrong, and I'm giggling like a maniac. I think you're probably right about the subclause and the substitution of could for would. Bless you.

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apel January 3 2004, 14:29:54 UTC

"Why do they keep the light in here?" he asked. His face was the picture of honest puzzlement.
I adore this scene. Haven't laughed that hard for, oh, several chapters. :-) Thank you, thank you, thank you!

purple_snitch January 19 2004, 13:52:32 UTC

For a moment Draco's eyes met Harry's and they were in perfect accord about the horror of life without Quidditch.

Oh, I do love my boys. (Er, I mean 'our' boys. Don't want to be greedy...)