Comments | invisibletosee: CHAPTER THIRTY FOUR

invisibletosee

CHAPTER THIRTY FOUR

Dec 29, 2003 20:02

Less than half an hour had passed between the instant that Draco grabbed the snitch and vanished into thin air, and the moment that the ad-hoc rescue party arrived. ( Read more... )

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ex_ajhalluk585 December 30 2003, 20:10:34 UTC

portkey

It's bloody ridiculous, and totally, totally 18 C, but She always capitalised Portkey.

Wow. This is so fucking briliant. This has redeemed Christmas, and if you've ever met my mother (and, frankly, if you've encountered Emily at her worst then you've met my mother) you have no idea how grateful I could possibly be for that.

invisibletosee December 30 2003, 20:27:10 UTC

Portkey. portkey. Damn, you're right. I reckon I'm going to be too late to have the 'official' version on my site fixed up just yet, but I'll sort out this version and the one that I'll be sending to other archives.

I am pleased beyond all measure that this has brightened your festive season; and if Emily Longbottom is indeed based on your mother, then I'm sure your Christmas will have been far from dull. Ahem.

ex_ajhalluk585 December 30 2003, 20:17:54 UTC

It was impossible to forget how long it had taken Narcissa to die

Are they the sort of family where he sees his mother by her first name?

Um - I mean - ah?

invisibletosee December 30 2003, 20:29:57 UTC

That's a very good question, actually. Hmm. Must think about that one. Possibly, but I'd tend to say not. Hmm.

percysowner December 31 2003, 03:15:42 UTC

This is great. Poor Draco, knowing that Justin betrayed him, believing that Harry is rescuing him only because he needs information. He's such a woobie here.

One little nitpick.

Harry, furious tears stinging his eyes, was on the very brink of blowing his cover and hurling Avada Kadavra. I've always seen it spelled Avada Kedavra.

invisibletosee December 31 2003, 14:06:31 UTC

Oh, bless you. This is terrific -- it's like having scores of beta readers with fine-toothed combs.

not_vacillating December 31 2003, 16:47:10 UTC

keys might be"

and then vanished

Full stops needed, my dear.

And, oh, poor Draco. Betrayed, beaten, convinced he's seen as unimportant, and now in mortal danger again.

invisibletosee December 31 2003, 17:10:05 UTC

THANK you. Go team Multiple-person Beta!

not_vacillating December 31 2003, 17:14:19 UTC

:) Always glad to help.

purple_snitch January 19 2004, 12:50:49 UTC

and it was only by dint of some very nifty flying that Harry managed to dart through the door in his wake.

I'm really quite impresed that you successfully managed to use the word 'nifty' in such a sombre sentence.

I've no time to write a longer review, I simply must get to the next capter!