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[irregular_luvr]

boy your hand
softer than i thought
brushes the sorrow
right off my skin.
our laughter collides
we both end up crying
and we realize
we might have
something here.

Comments

[a_born_hero]

For so few words, this hits really hard.
If it wasn't supposed to be poem, it sounded like a good one.
If it was, it's good.
No suggestions at all, don't change a comma.

[neverland924]

i love it. the changes even better.

[cortlanderson]

all i can say is HMMP HMMP

[irregular_luvr]

shut up!