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phoenixastraea November 2 2007, 12:53:26 UTC
I have to say I *adored* this. Everything felt so natural and so in character for all of them, including flirty!Milo and flustered!Zach. This, however, has to be my favorite line:

The sound of the flush from inside the washroom broke them apart like nervous teenagers. They stared at each other in bewildered silence while the sound of running water came through the door. The heated moment was severed, leaving both of them confused.

I immediately had this clear vision in my mind of this moment. Just fantastic! I'm a growing Petlar fan and well, this may just cement it. Will you continue this story or was this a one shot?

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islandblue November 2 2007, 20:09:22 UTC
Everything felt so natural and so in character for all of them, including flirty!Milo and flustered!Zach.

That's such an awesome compliment- thank you very much. I just went with this idea that since Milo is Italian he must like stylish suits. And I tried to avoid any insight to what Zach might be thinking - what happened just happened.

Interesting that you'd pick that bit; it was one of the sentences in which I wasn't too sure about the wording.

One shot? Not sure . . I'm scared of where this story will lead me.

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phoenixastraea November 7 2007, 01:08:42 UTC
LOL I could see Milo going for Zach's style; he does look amazingly handsome dressed up. The spontaneity of Milo's actions fit very well in this story; the moment where they "break apart like teenagers" just...fit so well! I think the wording was very appropriate for the moment.

Was this the first time writing RPS for these two?

Also, I think my favorite icon of yours is the manip of Peter/Sylar in the rain. Did you ever happen to post those images anywhere? They're truly amazingly done.

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islandblue November 9 2007, 16:02:52 UTC
Yeah, this was the first time I've attempted an RPS period. Usually they creep me out but this one came to me so easily.

As for the kissing in the rain manip, no I haven't yet posted that. I will eventually along with some other petlar manips I've been working on ;)

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islandblue November 2 2007, 20:10:50 UTC
Maybe if we wish really hard, some day it might happen. But probably not :(

Thanks and possibly!

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dana_serenity November 2 2007, 15:26:02 UTC
Oh this is so good! Very sexy actually ;)

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islandblue November 2 2007, 20:11:34 UTC
Thank you very much - and you can't avoid sexiness when Milo and Zach are involved :D

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yo_mawari November 2 2007, 19:22:48 UTC
♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

I loved this! The end was the best - especially Kristen's reaction to everything. I just didn't want them to stop.... ^_^

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islandblue November 2 2007, 20:14:21 UTC
Ha ha I was actually thinking about one of your characters when I wrote her - you know the one that was supposed to keep Sylar and Peter trapped but got distracted and then only made sure she got the surveillance tape?

And who would want them to stop? Kristen should just lock them in a room together ;)

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yo_mawari November 3 2007, 02:31:19 UTC
You mean the random fangirl? I'm honored!

They'd have to be insane to want them to stop. I would love to see her locking them in a room together. She could play matchmaker. ^_^

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islandblue November 4 2007, 23:07:12 UTC
Seriously, random fangirl should have her own series. She could suddenly pop up during canonical events and wreak fangril havoc - it'd be awesome :D

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pyjamagurl November 2 2007, 22:54:26 UTC
Great story! I really liked this, you made Zilo so cute <3 I loved the interactions between the characters, it was great. As well as Milo and Zach's reactions to each others costumes, it was so cute.

Is there more? I really loved it!

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islandblue November 3 2007, 04:34:34 UTC
Zilo reeks of cuteness ;) And I mean really, who can resist gladiator-ware or a sexy suit?

Slight chance I'll continue this. I'll see how it goes.

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