I don't think I know anybody else who could've written such a sparsely elegant poem about the bearded lady.
It's very nice - pretty imagery, good pacing, and a clear voice despite the brevity of the piece.
My only thing: I'd like the rhythm of the first line better if it was a syllable longer, i.e. "and EVERYONE laughs." That's all I've got - can't really fuck with this at all.
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It's very nice - pretty imagery, good pacing, and a clear voice despite the brevity of the piece.
My only thing: I'd like the rhythm of the first line better if it was a syllable longer, i.e. "and EVERYONE laughs." That's all I've got - can't really fuck with this at all.
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