Same old story..

[ix_john_doe_xi]

...and I'm still feeling the part of the antagonist

Comments

[thepoetnight]

its not bad, you need to work on your rhythm though, its okay most of the time but sometimes its just plain awful, could use some work stylistically too, over all not half bad

[ix_john_doe_xi]

Who's hand is that? in the pic?

As for style, I was going for fancy metaphor, failure!

[thepoetnight]

That's my hand lol. And I didnt mean in terms of the entire thing, but rather like far smaller parts, like the way you phrased things or the lack of lesser metaphors within the one you speak of