therealljidol week 27: be patient and tough; someday this pain will be useful to you

Aug 08, 2017 16:48

In all the stories, it's the stepmother that's wicked, not the mother ( Read more... )

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murielle August 9 2017, 03:24:32 UTC
Excellent! You drew me in and held me to the very end. Well done, you! Well done.

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j0ydivided August 10 2017, 21:08:15 UTC
Thank you!

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penpusher August 9 2017, 18:30:39 UTC
A frightful and palpable tale with a shock of a twist, just when I thought you were going to go full on Grimm, you turned Disney!

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j0ydivided August 10 2017, 21:45:10 UTC
Heh, I dunno if Disney involves blood sacrifice, but thank you! :)

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i_17bingo August 10 2017, 12:39:02 UTC
That was wild. I really enjoyed the escalation of it, as the magic overtook her mother. I also enjoyed watching the narrator's powers grow, even while she resisted it. Also, there was a happy ending!

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j0ydivided August 10 2017, 21:45:23 UTC
Thanks! Yeah, I wanted to give it a happy ending, if I could. :)

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messygorgeous August 10 2017, 15:42:56 UTC
I love a good modern magic story! At first, I was thinking the issues with her mom were psychological or hormonal, something medical. But I was excited to find magic! I really thought she was going to take her mom out, there in the end, but your ending feels right and true.

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j0ydivided August 10 2017, 21:45:53 UTC
Thank you! I was afraid that the ending would come off on the wrong note -- I didn't want it to seem too "pat", but I also didn't want to give it a grim ending (because that was expected, and I thought Gabbie deserved better). :)

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rayaso August 10 2017, 20:27:44 UTC
What a great end! I loved how you tied everything in to your beginning about mothers-stepmothers. Too bad the mother's magic periods weren't tied to a sports schedule. That was such an amusing suggestion!

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j0ydivided August 10 2017, 21:46:33 UTC
Ha, right? I seriously contemplated making it tied to college football somehow, but ultimately stepped away from that, because I couldn't think of a way to make it work that didn't come off as totally ridiculous.

Thanks for reading, and for the kind words!

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