Comments | jack_batelin: LJ Idol Chapter 11: Run, Don't Walk

jack_batelin

LJ Idol Chapter 11: Run, Don't Walk

Jan 23, 2010 17:26

Andrea and I have been in Omaha for less than two days. She is worried about her friend, Carol, and I am failing to acquire new leads. Worse, she keeps pressuring me for results. I'm out of my area, working with little to no leads, and every few hours she complains that I'm not closer to finding her friend ( Read more... )

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comedychick January 24 2010, 02:06:04 UTC

Oh man, cliffhanger or what?

I am so enjoying this story and glad you've made it this far! (I've been worried a couple times!)

jack_batelin January 25 2010, 16:29:56 UTC

I've been worried more than once, myself.

To be honest, I wanted to survive to exactly this point. When I started, I had in mind ending a chapter not just mid-sentence, but mid-word. When this week's topic was announced, I knew that this would be the week. So, if I get eliminated, at least I got to the point in the story I wanted to.

Although, I'd prefer not to be eliminated, of course. I'd like the chance to show what cut Jack off so abruptly.

comedychick January 25 2010, 20:46:32 UTC

Well at this point in the polls, it looks like you'll still be here next week, so I do hope we get to see what happens next!

shadowwolf13 January 24 2010, 08:14:46 UTC

Ohhhhh!

I hope she listens at some point ... but I won't hold my breath for that. I hope he makes it away.

jack_batelin January 25 2010, 16:31:01 UTC

Only one way to find out. :-)

baxaphobia January 24 2010, 13:49:12 UTC

I'm becoming more involved in this story as it goes on!

jack_batelin January 25 2010, 16:32:35 UTC

I'm glad. I'm having a lot of fun with this little experiment.

alycewilson January 25 2010, 04:00:00 UTC

Run, Andrea, run!

jack_batelin January 25 2010, 16:38:38 UTC

Ooo. An Andrea fan? I was getting the impression that most people didn't like her.

alycewilson January 25 2010, 17:39:27 UTC

Well, no one wants to see someone go like that. Besides, it would just create more problems for our hero. ^_^

mstrobel January 25 2010, 11:23:55 UTC

That ending!! Oh man, you sure know how to do it!

jack_batelin January 25 2010, 16:36:24 UTC

Thank you.

The reason I did this little experiment of a modern noir story using the prompts as different chapters is because I've always wanted to write a detective story, but I didn't think I could. (I hold Frank Miller's "Sin City: Family Values" up as an ideal example of something like what I want to be able to write.)

I honestly didn't expect to last very long, but knew that if I just did the Home Game from the outset I would never get around to actually writing the entries.

I'm very happy to still be in, and happier still that people are enjoying my attempts.