Comments | jackiestolz: Ordinary, chapter 14

jackiestolz

Ordinary, chapter 14

May 25, 2012 09:11

summary: Ian is diagnosed with cancer. In this chapter, Ian thinks of everyone living without him.
warnings: sadness and language.
rating: pg-13

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jackiestolz May 25 2012, 15:42:15 UTC

Thank you! And it feels more real for the readers now because it feels more real for Ian now. In the beginning, he knew what was happenning, and he accepts it, but he doesn't truly have a feel for what's going on (sort of like getting assigned a paper in school and it's due in a month or two).
I tried to make sure the readers felt what Ian felt. Like when Ian first met Kris, he didn't really trust him, and most of the commenters didn't either.
And yeah, you'll see Ian's concern for Anthony a bit more in future chapters.

9800andseagulls May 25 2012, 23:11:26 UTC

This was utterly beautiful. The emotion was so raw, and I felt like I could really sense Ian's pain and mental suffering. Amazing amazing job. This is one of the best stories I have read!

jackiestolz May 26 2012, 02:13:44 UTC

Thank you so much! I really want people to feel Ian's pain, now and especially in later chapters, to make it more realistic. Oh my god, your reviews are always so sweet, thank you :)

9800andseagulls May 27 2012, 23:06:34 UTC

Well my reviews have to be sweet! The story is just SO amazing!