I Should Go
Title: I Should Go
Author: Jaimy818. (http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2634040/)
Rating: M
Based on: TV Series
Relationships: Damon Salvatore and Elena Gilbert
Warnings: adult content
Disclaimers: I don't own the Vampire Diaries. If I would then Damon and Elena would be living on an deserted ( Read more... )
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What I love about the way you write is that you capture that kind of sexual tension *brilliantly.* You have the perfect blend emotions, and smut in it, and you know how to build a scene from the beginning so the sex scene has momentum. *Grins*
The awareness between them was excellent; the desire, attraction, and longing palpable, and you kept the emotional tension between them too. It wasn't just like "Damon I want you. "Oh Elena I want you too." It all had meaning, and the push and pull between the characters which makes a story better than just good.
Keep writing :D You have skills, babe.
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Yay, I think there was a dramatic difference from this story to the one that I previously read. I think it's because of the setting of it being one continuous scene.
My favorite part wad this:
He wasn’t a psychic, he just knew her. It frightened him sometimes to know all the places he shouldn't go. Elena did some of her own thinking while Damon had his inner battle, her thoughts were slightly impure.
It totally explains the understanding that all of us Damon/Elema fans see in them!
Also this part was totally believable:
He could have sworn he saw a flash of lust in her eyes when he looked at her again, but he told himself that he imagined it.
I'm excited for you to expand your horizons in story writing. Really hope that you'll write a first-person Damon story soon, because I have a good feeling that it will be funny.
xoxo
Sar
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