Bloody Hell!

Oct 02, 2006 14:10

I'm writing a new story. This is the first chapter. Constructive criticism is always appreciated.

JD

Chapter One of The Potfather )

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geisha36 October 2 2006, 22:48:15 UTC
One of my first reactions is that it made me laugh, in that 'dark humor' sort of way. In fact, that is what pulled me in to the story. Now I want to know WHY everything has suddenly gone ape-shit bananas besides the whole sleeping with someone else part.

Quick question: did he take the cat upstairs with him after he picked it up?

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kitcatk8 October 3 2006, 00:26:10 UTC
My constructive criticism:

They're all bat-shit crazy!

Well, not the guy anymore. Assuming he's dead.

I liked it. And I agree with Nicole. I'd like to know why.

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