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[jaolianas]

Naming talk. I refuse to go further until I at least know what's going on, but some names changed and Desi is messing with Kat, I believe. Also, I want to revisit Sincerity and don't quite know what to do with her.

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[superfinemind]

I am grinning deviously. You're making my Desi all evil-like. It's great. I fully intend to write this over as her.

But: end of third-to-last paragraph, what?

[jaolianas]

Think about it. I'll show you. I've seen people stand like this - perhaps I should just say that her hips were leaning against the arm and leave it at that.

[superfinemind]

I thought about it. It didn't help. You have vague prepositions and it just bloody makes no sense change it you silly girl.

[jaolianas]

...okay, point about the prepositions.