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[ YOUR EX-LOVER IS DEAD / fanfiction/ PG-13/ noncon, history ]

Jun 10, 2010 18:32

Title: Your Ex-Lover Is Dead
Author: slash4femme
Fandom: Hetalia
Pairing/Category: Japan/China
Rating: PG-13
Warning: violent images, reference made to non-con, The Treaty of Nanjing and The Opium War
Disclaimer: I do not own any of these characters, I do not make money off of doing this. The only thing I'm getting out of this is pure ( Read more... )

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It's good! hikarikame June 10 2010, 23:04:39 UTC

Besides some commas here and there[lack of] and things like this:

"When Yao tears finally stop and he curls up head in Kiku’s lap and Kiku strokes his hair. "

where it just goes on and on, it's a good story. I'm glad you wrote it.

Re: It's good! slash4femme June 11 2010, 18:20:35 UTC

ah yes, I know my comma usage is bad. ::shakes head at self::

I'm glad you liked it though.

Re: It's good! hikarikame June 12 2010, 00:59:37 UTC

Don't worry, just keep at it, ok? =D

<3

Those Pesky Regulations! xD dreamsofdest1ny June 19 2010, 04:36:50 UTC

Um, I was wondering if you could post the entirety of this story on the community? As opposed to a link, just for the sake of backup and whatnot. <3

Thank you - I'll er, R&R as soon as it's up - you have three days!

Re: Those Pesky Regulations! xD dreamsofdest1ny June 19 2010, 04:51:35 UTC

Oh Right! (I knew there was one more thing!) - the title!
If you could, could you copy and paste the line below (in its entirety) as the new title? If you do, you'll notice that your entry will be able to conform with all the past entries! *nods*

[ YOUR EX-LOVER IS DEAD / fanfiction/ PG-13/ noncon, history ]

Thanks again~

Re: Those Pesky Regulations! xD slash4femme June 20 2010, 18:18:23 UTC

Hey,
sure no problem I totally understand about wanting a back up copy.

Sorry I didn't get to it sooner I've been away for the weekend.

AND THERE WAS HISTORY TOO~~ dreamsofdest1ny June 21 2010, 10:42:20 UTC

warning: much fangirling, unnecessary hearts and reiteration of your own story. and probably a lot of implausible extrapolation. It's what happens. D ( ... )

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Wow! :DDD exotification June 21 2010, 10:51:53 UTC

The dialogue and characterizations were lovely. A couple typos; nothing major - good job with this fic (is this your first Kiku/Yao? In which case, I would urge more! xD)!

Re: Wow! :DDD slash4femme June 21 2010, 13:03:45 UTC

thank you so much. Yes this is my first fic for this pairing and I would love to write more just as soon as I get inspired to do so.

Very nice dialogue! acquiesceme June 22 2010, 02:03:51 UTC

It's very nicely pulled off; I like how you had Kiku assume Yao was doing this against his will and whatnot. Great job for opium-addicted!Yao (I have always imagined him to be more in-control of his actions than normal people~) and heck, the whole story!

Hope to see more from you! :3

Re: Very nice dialogue! slash4femme June 22 2010, 11:43:04 UTC

thank you.

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slash4femme July 1 2010, 01:22:23 UTC

thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for pointing out the typo.