If in Breaking Dawn before the battle they needed more fighters would Jasper call on Maria for help? If he did this is how it would play out. Jasper's POV.
This is a pretty good fic, with an interesting premise! And it's refreshing to read a fic by a writer with a decent sense of English grammar:)
However, your writing has one serious flaw: spelling. Quite a few words here are misspelled, something as a reader I find very jarring. If you want to improve your writing, working on spelling is definitely what you first have to do. I composed a list of the most obvious mistakes in this fic while I was reading, which you can see below. I think your biggest problem in endings and "doubles", like it's two b's in "stubbornly". Some of these I'm sure are typos, but I still included them.
The List: "i'll" is "I'll" (I is always capitalised
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Thank you for all the support! Trust me, I don't take any offence, I know that my spelling is horrid. Also, these are all first drafts, I haven't gone back to change anything just to add more. I probaly won't get to changing the spelling until nest week but I will definitly use your corrections since the spell checker dosen't work for me on the post editor.
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However, your writing has one serious flaw: spelling. Quite a few words here are misspelled, something as a reader I find very jarring. If you want to improve your writing, working on spelling is definitely what you first have to do. I composed a list of the most obvious mistakes in this fic while I was reading, which you can see below. I think your biggest problem in endings and "doubles", like it's two b's in "stubbornly". Some of these I'm sure are typos, but I still included them.
The List: "i'll" is "I'll" (I is always capitalised ( ... )
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Thanks :)
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