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Joy

Jul 31, 2017 04:00

Hi everyone, and welcome to our final Monday Morning Warm-up ( Read more... )

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Joy anonymous July 31 2017, 11:01:45 UTC

I am feeling annoyed today. I do not think I did well on my final exam. I feel like I am adrift not feeling anchored. My thoughts are about John in Vietnam. He has been in Vietnam for five years. My days are shadowed by the fear I have that I may never see him again. His lettters always raise my spirits. John has a sense of humor that he shares in his letters. He makes me laugh out loud when I read his letters. I'm on my way to work. I work in a cosmetic factory which is mundane, but I have lots of friends that work there and we talk a lot. I arrive at the factory and get out of my car. I start walking to the front door when someone calls my name. I turn around to see who is calling me. Tears escape from my eyes and I am suddenly dizzy and overwhelmed. John's strong embrace wraps me up, centering me. I feel grounded again knowing he is alive and safe.

Re: Joy jbknowles July 31 2017, 11:37:26 UTC

Nice job! I love the word "dizzy" to describe overwhelming relief and joy. :)

RE: Joy ext_4204157 July 31 2017, 12:30:44 UTC

I like that you've got tears in there, but that it's the moment you realize your character isn't sad. Cool juxtaposition!

Joy ext_4204157 July 31 2017, 12:16:28 UTC

19 more days. 19 more days until I'm back in the place where my stomach unknots itself, secure in the knowledge that adults are protectors. That the books will pile up in a never-ending supply. That my teacher will see inside me and not judge me for the things I have to keep hidden. I woke up today and, as I do each and every day of summer break, crossed another day off the calendar. The closer I get to the start of school, the lighter my burdens feel. My summer will begin in 19 days.

Re: Joy jbknowles July 31 2017, 19:33:15 UTC

Anticipation! Nice! :)

Re: Joy ext_4189975 August 1 2017, 01:01:15 UTC

I love this, and it's a good reminder that for some of our students, summer isn't a vacation and school feels more like their home.

Joy ext_4204179 July 31 2017, 12:41:02 UTC

I am a little sad that this is the last Monday Morning Warm-up. Thank you for your wonderful prompts, Jo! I apologize if my scene is too long ( ... )

Re: Joy jbknowles July 31 2017, 19:36:07 UTC

I love the thrill you've captured here. Nice job!!! :)

Thank you! ext_3711217 July 31 2017, 12:42:33 UTC

Jo,

I just want to say THANK YOU for this morning's prompt. And, thank you for being here for the past several years of TW. I've gained so much. It's super fun watching your success as a writer. I wish you many more book deals.

Re: Thank you! jbknowles July 31 2017, 19:41:23 UTC

OH, you are so welcome! It's my pleasure. Thanks for participating!

Joy ext_2035891 July 31 2017, 13:45:17 UTC

Brian stepped into the warm water, waves lapping at his feet. The sun has just risen over the cottage. Even though it was his last morning his heart felt like the sun, shades of orange and gold. He stepped further into the waves, the water refreshing his soul as it did every morning. His soul purified, scrubbed new like the sands between his feet, stretching forth into a new day like the rays of the sun over the cottage. Total reclamation.

Re: Joy jbknowles July 31 2017, 19:42:03 UTC

Oh my gosh I love the line "his heart felt like the sun". Beautiful!