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jbknowles

Watch Where You're Going

Jul 09, 2018 05:07

Welcome to another summer of Teachers Write ( Read more... )

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ext_4722198 July 9 2018, 13:12:18 UTC

I accidentally submitted my writing anonymously. I am signed in now. Character’s name is Molly.

Your advice proved to be true and extremely helpful.

jbknowles July 9 2018, 13:31:37 UTC

I'm so glad, Sherry! Thanks for posting. And even if this isn't exactly how you wind up ending your story, it's reassuring to have a vision to writer toward. Right? I love it!

Where I'm going pvoneuler July 9 2018, 13:47:12 UTC

This was a helpful exercise. I wasn't sure if you wanted us to post what we wrote in this comment. Here's a link to what I wrote. Comments or questions welcome.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uVX1pPbg-P1ieRaxW0fUyf48ntEEwmB6EAnh1MkzBtc/edit?usp=sharing

Re: Where I'm going jbknowles July 9 2018, 19:30:29 UTC

Oh, I love this ending image! Perfect!!!! I think this is a great moment to write toward.

anonymous July 9 2018, 14:55:21 UTC

Okay, give it to me..how to make this ending better...how to develop the beginning. All suggestions welcome ( ... )

jbknowles July 9 2018, 18:25:23 UTC

Hi Karen!
Thanks for sharing. My first reaction is that this feels like the beginning, not an end. He feels as though he's just starting a personal journey. Is that your intent?

Thanks, Jo! ext_3217870 July 9 2018, 15:10:50 UTC

Creative writing comes in spurts for me (mostly due to lack of time and too much work), but I greatly enjoy Teachers Write! This prompt certainly primed the pump and gave me some inspiration for scenes that would have occurred earlier in the narrative. It was easy to
I turn the photograph and just allow the vision to come and the words to write themselves. Thank you again!

Re: Thanks, Jo! jbknowles July 9 2018, 18:25:55 UTC

That's so great!!!! I'm really glad you found it helpful!

Daruma Dolls anonymous July 9 2018, 15:49:00 UTC

I love this so much, because it reminds me of Daruma dolls. With the Daruma doll you fill in one eye when you set a goal for yourself and fill in the other eye when you have reached your goal. When you have an end goal in sight it is easier to achieve it with direction ( ... )

Re: Daruma Dolls jbknowles July 9 2018, 18:28:08 UTC

Ooh, intriguing!!!! I like the voice here a lot! It doesn't seem like it would end with the elbow grab, but I like that you have in mind a surprise to this sort of somber end. You've got something really solid and vivid to write toward. Great work!!!!!