Cleanse

[jdowd]

I am not ready for Heaven

Comments

On "Cleanse"

[anonymous]

Wow. I read this one over a few times to make sure I knew what I was reading. I must say it's quite impressive. I love how it opened with a religious allusion, which worked in perfectly since the speaker is (I hope I'm right about this) at a funeral, or a graveyard at least. The only part I was a little iffy about was when you talk about the smiles (which were described beautifully) but when the adjective "seductive" was brought into it I guess I was a little, well, not confused, but it just felt like it came out of nowhere. The feel of the poem was sort of shifted a bit away from the speaker's sentiments and suddenly to a very different topic altogether, even if only briefly. This was probably not intended, but automatically I think when most people hear the word "seduce" they think of something sexually related (or maybe that's just me having my head in the gutter...) Maybe a word like luring could work

[cosbean]

Dear Justin. I am waiting for you to call me back and help me with my english question. I came here to read your stuff. Its all great.. like its always been great... but.. the fact you listen to bright eyes makes me want to puke on you. Love, Your Sister.