Affecting and well-written. Got a little long in the second part, but the action parts were viewable in the mind's eye as if being played out in the cartoon. The ending was good, and it feels like a necessary episode in these lives. I wished we could have caught back up with the rock concert gang, though I understand we probably know what they were doing because of their earlier pronouncements.
Yeah, I'm not sure there's actually a plot there, per se. I think everything goes pretty much as expected, against all odds.
The second part is long and talky. I am guilty of wanting to put tangential details in that I'm suspect I'm never going to have a chance to express elsewhere, so it feels a little padded.
Glad the action sequences turned out. They were a bear to write, pun unintentional.
I'm just headed to work and thus can't read your story now or comment on it, but I did want to mention that I looked up the thread on EQ and found amusing the people going on in the comments about *the* Jeffrey Wells.
You've gotten a bit internet-famous these last couple years. :D
Yeah, it's a little weird to have my middle name be reported as "freaking", but not a wholly unwelcome sort of weird. I think maybe people who like talking animals like both "Skin Horse" and Ponies or something?
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The second part is long and talky. I am guilty of wanting to put tangential details in that I'm suspect I'm never going to have a chance to express elsewhere, so it feels a little padded.
Glad the action sequences turned out. They were a bear to write, pun unintentional.
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You've gotten a bit internet-famous these last couple years. :D
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