Midnight Music

[jellybean05jmmb]

So...i've been writing poems lately...this is one...it really sucks...but i want critism so i can better it...lol...so here goes

Comments

[indianesque]

hmmm, i really like it...its cool
i'd offer constructive criticism...but i'm not good at poetry, lol
i really like it though :)

[jellybean05jmmb]

thanks...i don't know if i like it or not yet

[huanganator]

I LOVE IT!! though i think that for every stanza, you should start the second line with the same word as the last word of the first line. so that way, there's a pattern. for example,
"I think I shall cry
[cry] sad tears for you
My midnight reflection"

but i looove the content!

[jellybean05jmmb]

thanks babe..that would actually make more sense...that helps a lot!

[zestyorangepeel]

I had the exact same thought... I loved it Jenn... It was actualy quite moving... there's a lot that could be read into about it.... it's very good.