To Find Shamballa -- Chapter Ten, Part Three

[inuyashanohime]

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Transylvania, 1921
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Edward Elric should have watched where he was leaning. He shouldn’t have been leaning as close as he was, staring at parted lips for the occasional English word, something to piece together whatever in the hell was going on in this world or the next, strung together only in half-sentences and word fragments

Comments

[peace_of_hope]

I enjoy the plot you have going here and look forward to some romance between Al x Win and some Ed x Hei, however, if I may offer some constructive criticism

[inuyashanohime]

You know...I am moved beyond words at the fact that you would stop here and give me this much feedback. *_* That's the first thing.

And secondly...

I really don't know what to say. Just...thank you so much for reading, and that I'll take all of this to heart to make my writing better.

Though I'm not sure hot love will come anytime soon for Ed and Hei...I'm trying my best to make their attraction natural, and more realistic.

But next chapter, I'm hoping things will be more structured. I'm even doing extra planning and characterization to make sure of this.

Again, I...

Thank you.

Thank you so much.

*blushflail*

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I totally fail at giving review responses...