Comments | jen_fics: Ed x Alfons: "Fucked Up" (NSFW!!!)

inuyashanohime in jen_fics

Ed x Alfons: "Fucked Up" (NSFW!!!)

Mar 08, 2008 01:53

Title: Fucked Up
Pairing: Ed x Alfons
Genre: Angst. Angst and smut.
Rating: NC-17
Note: Some instaporn I thought up while working on a scanslation for Double Bind with
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nsfw, edxalfons, nc-17, fma

Comments 18

silkendreammaid March 8 2008, 09:42:31 UTC

instaporn is good...lol

silken :)

inuyashanohime March 8 2008, 18:04:25 UTC

:3 Instaporn IS good <3 The best thing about it is how spontaneous it is...it seems that when I write something on the fly, it turns out better than when I seriously plan stuff out long-term O.o

himura_arimikoe March 8 2008, 10:01:55 UTC

....... that was so incredibly hot.

Cold shower now. No more porn right before bed anymore dammit.

inuyashanohime March 8 2008, 18:02:48 UTC

Hahaha!! I'm glad you liked it <3

But porn before bed is good! ...okay, not all the time, but sometimes it is!! XDDD

cryogenia March 8 2008, 10:30:45 UTC

*_* Quite delicious. It's interesting how it's ambiguous whether or not Ed is turned on by the kink factor of the pseudo-incest, or whether it's really that he's using Hei as a real Al-substitute.

inuyashanohime March 8 2008, 18:01:50 UTC

Wow, it really IS pretty ambiguous...O_O That was actually completely unintentional.

I guess it could be seen either way XD

...and you know...compared to the original idea in my head as I was writing it...

I like it being ambiguous a bit better.

gracemac March 8 2008, 17:21:20 UTC

I did start to count how many times Ed was swearing but it go to be too many ^^;;;

*notes Ed likes to swear when he is feeling EXTREMELY good* XDDD

inuyashanohime March 8 2008, 17:48:38 UTC

Really?

I didn't think it was that excessive...I mean, I'm pretty sure he'd swear about something like this too.

Though thank you for reading <3

gracemac March 9 2008, 03:36:54 UTC

It wasn't too excessive, it just shows how he feels. Since Ed is never the good poet. XDDDD

peace_of_hope March 9 2008, 01:08:23 UTC

This is porn with the angst!cherry on top--which is something I really love. I think this piece was actually really well written, even if it was done quick. It's got a conversational, personal style to match the first person point of view (which I think it really effective for angst!porn) and had a definite cyclical motif with the "I'm so fucked up." I was really pleased that it stayed consistent throughout, but didn't linger too long on Ed's angst, or too long on the porn.

VERY nicely written. And you captured Ed's personality quite well in so few words. :)

inuyashanohime March 9 2008, 02:50:55 UTC

*blush* Wow, I was actually expecting a lot of people to hate this, since I wrote it in about a half hour. I'm really glad you liked it!

I wanted it conversational since I've never done anything in first person before, and since characterization is my weakness, I wanted to have a bit of practice in it. That, and I don't write things in first person really...it's good to mix things up a bit, you know?