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jenszabo

Detained Chapter 8 -- Reciprocation

Jun 08, 2009 00:19

May-Hogwarts Marcus didn’t really like watching Quidditch games any more. At least, not when he cared about the outcome. If it was just two random teams, he could kick back and revel in clever play or horrific injuries to the seekers. But if a bloke let himself get invested, it was a misery. Knowing there was no way to affect the outcome, and yet ( Read more... )

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bluebronzisland June 16 2009, 12:34:33 UTC

Marcus had heard teammates compare getting off to flying, but they were morons. Flying was strategy, trajectory, velocity. This was fucking anarchy.

i really like that; it's quite poetic. :)

and basically everything marcus says in katie's room, especially:
“I…I get to be the guy who helped you, that’s all. It’s an even trade.”

He was cursing himself as soon as the words passed his lips. He felt gutted, his entrails spread out for her amused inspection.
finally being a decent human, even if he's not actually saying what he should be saying. and now he knows how katie feels, though he probably doesn't realize it. there's hope for them, at least. <3

jenszabo June 20 2009, 21:16:31 UTC

Glad you liked the Quidditch lines. One of my fave things about Marcus is how he feels about Quidditch.

He's still talking in terms of trade, but at least he's no longer keeping the terms to himself, and he's at least THINKING about what she needs. Baby steps.

bloodyzabini December 6 2009, 11:29:59 UTC

Not a surprsie but i love the change room scene. Everything else is needed but we onl wait for their interaction to happens =)
Its both funny with Ron and sad with Marcus who wants to obliviate himself.
Now we know what happens nxt, after thoses baby steps but its still a sad moment, when they are both desesperate and pessimistic because they cant have a better relationship, where they would be honnest and don't hurt each other everytime.