Jetko Drabble

[akistuki_kaze]

Just a drabble I was suddenly inspired to write a little while ago. The idea of a Jet-centric fic seems more appealing to me than ever lately. I'd like to continue this when I find the time. For now, I hope to receive some constructive criticism and a few ideas because I have absolutely no idea where the story is supposed to be going. Like I said,

Comments

[somariel]

This is pretty good. I don't see any major problems with anything, although you did misspell "lightning".

I'd love to see what Jet thinks if/when he finds out that "Li" is actually Prince/Firelord Zuko. Maybe have him find out that "Li" is Zuko after Ba Sing Se falls and cover what he thinks at that point, then cover what he thinks when he hears that Zuko helped end the war and has been crowned Firelord.

ETA: There's also an unnecessary "the" in the line "Smellerbee poked the Jet’s evident furrow."

[akistuki_kaze]

Thanks for the suggestion! As you can see, it hasn't been proofread ^^' I never seem to be able to catch those small errors on my own, so thanks for pointing them out.
I want a period of time when Jet is separated from Zuko to contrast with a time when they work together as a team. I feel like they'd be hell of a pair of fighters, being fellow swordsmen and all. And I definitely think that Jet deserves a chance in helping to end the war, although I'm not sure where to stick him in. I was thinking the invasion would be suitable, or maybe the Ba Sing Se fight when Zuko chooses sides (that would most definitely inspire a lot of angst)