Comments | jij: The House of the Earth Part 2 (6/8): Something Deeper Than Pain

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The House of the Earth Part 2 (6/8): Something Deeper Than Pain

Oct 03, 2008 11:05

Title: Chapter Six: Something Deeper Than Pain
Pairing/Characters: Kal/Bruce
Notes: " The House of the Earth" is an AU in which a few thousand Kryptonians escaped the destruction of Krypton to flee to Earth and enslave its people.
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 2900
Summary: A Kryptonian party causes problems for Kal and Bruce and things get complicated.

( How blind could his fellow Kryptonians be, to not see the fierce intensity and disdain right in front of their eyes? )

fic, the house of the earth

Comments 35

ranlynn October 3 2008, 02:46:10 UTC

Looks like Kal isn't the only one who's 'world' is being turned upside down.

jij October 3 2008, 03:04:43 UTC

That is...a very good summary. Poor Bruce. He was dangerously close to cracking entirely as I wrote this chapter. It was not what he signed up for...

icarus_chained October 3 2008, 02:47:51 UTC

I'm too tired right now to give you a coherant review, I need to sleep so badly. But ... I'm crying. That was ... beautiful. Sad and hurtful and achey, and very, very beautiful. Because that is so very Bruce, and so very Kal.

Thank you!

jij October 3 2008, 03:07:37 UTC

You're tired and sick as well, poor Icarus! *gives you hankies, chicken soup, whatever it takes to make you feel better* But thank you so much. This chapter made me terribly...nervous to write. Not unhappy like the last one because yes, there's beauty there as well if I can catch it, but the balance in this one was so delicate that I'm not sure the story stays on the tightrope, so to speak.

bradygirl_12 October 3 2008, 02:57:41 UTC

Excellent!

The irony is bittersweet here: not Kal who makes the mistake in public, but Bruce.

But Bruce is falling for his Master hard and fast and he can try and control it all he wants.

He'll fail.

jij October 3 2008, 04:23:56 UTC

The irony is bittersweet here: not Kal who makes the mistake in public, but Bruce.

I didn't even really see that irony until I started posting this arc and people were like, "Oh, Kal's going to get them in so much trouble!" and I realized that actually, just the opposite almost happens...

Bruce is a tough one, passionate and focused, and furious at himself for being distracted... but he's still human and able to care and feel and want, however much he might not like that.

bradygirl_12 October 3 2008, 04:48:52 UTC

I didn't even really see that irony until I started posting this arc and people were like, "Oh, Kal's going to get them in so much trouble!" and I realized that actually, just the opposite almost happens...

I call that a 'pure moment', where you divine a revelation from your own fic that you wrote! LOL!

Bruce is a tough one, passionate and focused, and furious at himself for being distracted... but he's still human and able to care and feel and want, however much he might not like that.

Another irony! ;)

Bruce's human emotions keep getting in his way, but if he didn't have those emotions, he'd have no connection to the humanity he's so determined to serve! :)

ex_felonazc October 3 2008, 03:11:04 UTC

...I still can't think of anything coherent or useful to say.

Jen, I think I love you. Because you hurt them so beautifully, and yet handle it all with a delicacy that keeps it from being too angsty. I'm afraid I would make the angst too heavy-handed, "LOOK, CAN YOU SEE ME? I AM SAD BECAUSE I CAN'T HAVE YOU!", just to emphasize the point. But you have managed it perfectly, and color me jealous.

*pats Kal*

jij October 3 2008, 04:34:32 UTC

Awww, thanks! I really...struggled with writing angsty without being heavy--it doesn't really come naturally or easily to me. The story I'm working on now has angsty moments, and they keep tipping right over into the purple and I have to go back and fix them, lol. So I'm glad to hear the balance seems to have mostly worked here! *hugs*

tilco_cat October 3 2008, 07:40:10 UTC

I love the angst in the fic! OwO (I'm a bit of an angst addict...)

Kal is gotta be the only one who could make Bruce feel helpless... and I love him for it!
Bruce is so serious~~~ he sure is an all or nothing guy... sometimes I wish he could just forget the consequences and go with the flow...

I love your writing style~~~ it's always so pleasant to read *w*

jij October 3 2008, 11:53:43 UTC

I love the angst in the fic! OwO (I'm a bit of an angst addict...)

Heh, it is so very much not my strength as a writer, but I'm enjoying the challenge in this one!

Bruce is so serious~~~ he sure is an all or nothing guy... sometimes I wish he could just forget the consequences and go with the flow...

It really is all or nothing with Bruce--when he commits, he does it with all his heart, whether it's a Mission or a person (or, with some difficulty, both). :) I love him for it, but it doesn't make things easy for him, that's for sure...

Thanks so much for commenting, glad you're liking it so far!