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jij

The House of the Earth Part 2 (7/8): Understanding

Oct 05, 2008 23:56

Title: Chapter Seven: Understanding
Pairing/Characters: Kal-El, Bruce Wayne, Lex Luthor, Selina Kyle, John Henry Irons, Lois Lane
Notes: " The House of the Earth" is an AU in which a few thousand Kryptonians escaped the destruction of Krypton to flee to Earth and enslave its people.
Rating: PG
Word Count: 2450
Summary: Kal meets the leaders of two ( Read more... )

fic, the house of the earth

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jij October 6 2008, 13:55:24 UTC

I liked that line a lot too, so thank you! Kal is almost all potential right now, but it's a positive potential, at least. :) Glad you enjoyed! I should have this wrapped up by the end of the week at the latest, I hope...

ex_felonazc October 5 2008, 16:03:28 UTC

Oh, boys. You break my heart.

Lois is awesome! Smart lady, as usual. I approve. Any significance to her scar? Or is it just part of the trappings of a slave. Poor Kal, he wants to be friends with Selina. I hope he gets his wish someday. Though I completely understand her reluctance to forgive or forget.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

jij October 6 2008, 13:58:43 UTC

Lois is awesome! Smart lady, as usual. I approve. Any significance to her scar? Or is it just part of the trappings of a slave.

You know, I don't exactly know the story behyind the scar? I know it was caused by heat vision, but that's the only thing I'm sure of. I'm hoping she'll tell me a little more of her story in the next arc, perhaps...

Selina's a tough one--she remembers Kal as a child and wants to forgive him, I think, but can't trust herself to.

The last chapter of this arc should be up by the end of the week, beta willing! :) Thanks for reading and commenting!

brushed_velvet October 5 2008, 16:12:19 UTC

Lex was so delightfully caustic here but Kal handled himself well. Oh, and the tension between Selina and Kal? Delicious!

Lois gave him a long, assessing look. "You don't know how to read us very well yet, do you?" Lol! Lois read my mind!

I'm glad Bruce explained his silence during Lex's attack and admitting what he really wanted to say. It's these little glimpses of honesty that help lift the spirits.

Just a couple of typos:

if there is a world in which we can work together to being about a better world

He went over the Irons

jij October 6 2008, 14:01:46 UTC

Eeeeek eek eek, thank you for the typo catches. My beta will be flogged accordingly. :)

I'm glad Bruce explained his silence during Lex's attack and admitting what he really wanted to say. It's these little glimpses of honesty that help lift the spirits.

When I first imagined this scene, I wanted so much to have Bruce leap to his defense with a ringing affirmation of Kal's basic goodness...and then realized what that would cost him within the resistance, how they'd see him. So...no help coming from that quarter. Still, a private affirmation gives Kal (and hopefully the patient reader) enough hope to keep going, lol. Thank you for being patient!

premium_shaday October 5 2008, 17:04:12 UTC

<3

I am just too smitten with this story to provide any objective feedback!!

But this line: -For a moment, the cynicism fell away, and her eyes were the eyes of the girl he had known. "I hope so too," she said.- Was awesome!

jij October 6 2008, 14:03:40 UTC

Poor Selina! She likes Kal. She wants to believe the kid she knew is still there at some level. But she can't bring herself to trust him. I'm glad you liked it, I found both her and Lois hard to write her, the balance between trust and cynicism...

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jij October 6 2008, 14:09:26 UTC

From what I can remember of the brief glimpses of canon I've seen, that is the central problem between Lex and Kal, isn't it? That Luthor judges Kal by his own standards and can't understand what Kal is really about because Luthor isn't about that at all?

That is always Luthor's blind spot, yeah--he can't understand the idea that Kal might not put his own race first because he knows he would, in this case...

Lex sees Kal as a tool and doesn't care about being morally better then Kryptonians, he just wants his freedom, which is actually understandable in this situation. I find that I can sympathises and even agree with some of the things Lex says, even though I know he's not a good person.

I was going to write Lex as working with the Kryptonians, and he would have none of that. "I'm a villain, not a monster," he informed me, and I had to grant him that. :)

Also, it seems that Bruce is slowly realizing his own emotions. He didn't seem quite as startled about his passion towards Kal as he did before, because he was passionate about ( ... )