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Amazing start valpre November 28 2010, 04:43:38 UTC
What an amazing start Jill. I feel like I know your characters already and I slowly falling in love with our shy, awkward Talson.

I love the backdrop and plot you've created for this. I would never have dreamed up such an intrinsicate plot. Already it sounds well thought out, and well developed.

Can't wait for Talson's lunch date with Rita. And aw, Sabine is such a dear.

The Smith's house looks marvelous :-)

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jillyson November 28 2010, 07:13:32 UTC
All the credit for that house goes to Karima - I can't imagine how much work she put into recreating that house!

Rita gets her "date", and we learn more about Talson in the next chapter.

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xoxo_qui November 28 2010, 18:56:51 UTC
Wonderful start! I'm with Val, I am falling for Talson! He is cute, awkward, and best of all..smart!

I hope he opens up some to Rita! I agree, he needs a wife!

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jillyson November 28 2010, 22:48:34 UTC
Yeah, it's pretty bad when you forget your own birthday! Hopefully, she'll at least teach him how to talk to people!

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holleyb76 November 29 2010, 17:04:18 UTC
Good Job Jill!
What an imaginative idea for a story. The environment these people live in is a testament to your creative, twisted mind. LOL!!!
I also love Talson already ;) He's cute. LOL @ him forgetting to take his goggles off. You'd think someone would have told him.
Looks like he has found a true friend in Rita. Can't wait to see what happens at the "date".

A new type of simbot, huh? Interesting...

I wonder what these "Darklings" are.

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