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[jimmiesgurl48]

Okay, I did start a Dominic fic. It's just a few paragraphs, but I'm not sure I like it. I'm going to post it here (and not on my writing journal...yet) and hopefully at least one of you nice folks will read it and let me know if it sounds like total crap.

Comments

[teqsun]

"The shadows made a usually happy, bright hallway seem appallingly empty"
I love that line... It's /really/ visual.... I'm jealous... because i haven't written anything so well for a long time... I mean... Your words really scream some meaning... The words in fiction I've written lately just scream plot... though I think that's what I've always needed to work on... Short and sweet, rather than long and drawn out.

"It was an irrational fear, I know that. I’ve been told that my whole life. "
I like that too. It really takes us into the character's mind.

And I like how you've written Dom... because that contrast makes a great person and a great character... The teasiest, silliest person ever... knowing the boundaries... seemingly being able to sense something that few people can.

I excitedly await editions.

[teqsun]

Just to clarify to the renee's-journal-readers (since I already told her on IM), I /do/ know how to spell additions... I caught it right after I clicked enter, and wanted to kicm myself... and then laugh out loud!

Thank you for your time.